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 Jul 8 09, 17:42
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 Babylonian  Posts: 87 Joined: 27-November 06 Member No.: 361 Real Name: Ross Baird Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Mysty  |
Been critiquing the haikus and sewnuru's of others...so felt I should give everyone a shot at one of mine:
Quiet
The morning despairs... silence across the table... a still death of love. ace |
  
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Jul 27 09, 07:56
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 2,587 Joined: 9-August 03 From: Australia Member No.: 17 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry |
G'day, Mate. The morning despairs; >>> Yep! Like this silence across the table; >>> Yep! Like this a still death of love. >>> Hmm... Perhaps, more subtle. 'fills ears with failure' or something similar. Nice setiments. John ·······  ·······Arnfinn
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ace Quiet Jul 8 09, 17:42 
Marc-Andre Germain Hi Ace,
You've captured a moment, and it... Jul 8 09, 21:56 prerna bala yeah, i think the haiku of yours captures the mome... Jul 22 09, 05:30 alice Hi Ace,
I believe haiku is a very visual art form... Jul 28 09, 09:20 Cleo_Serapis Hi Ace,
I'm still trying to learn these short... Jul 28 09, 20:00 Psyche Hi ace!
How strange it is that different line... Jul 31 09, 22:31 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Ace,
The problem with senryus is that what... Aug 1 09, 07:28 Psyche I absolutely agree with Peggy about the punctuatio... Aug 1 09, 13:00 
ace Peggy * Syl:
You are both completely correct. ... Aug 1 09, 16:35 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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