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 Jul 20 09, 05:35
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 Assyrian  Posts: 201 Joined: 28-April 09 From: Canada Member No.: 784 Real Name: Marc-Andre Germain Writer of: Poetry  |
arid summer -
the oak by the septic tank dips its roots ·······  ······· |
  
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Jul 21 09, 05:18
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 2,587 Joined: 9-August 03 From: Australia Member No.: 17 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry |
G'day, Mark. I'm of the opinion that this is a good Haiku. It fulfils the basics.seasonal; present tense. And the three lines follow the requirments of: Where. Line one. A tick. arid summer - What. Line two. A tick. the oak by the septic tank When. Line three. A tick. dips its roots arid summer - the oak by the septic tank dips its roots A good haiku, Mate. Regards, John ······· ·······Arnfinn
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Marc-Andre Germain an American haiku (...the oak...) Jul 20 09, 05:35 
Arnfinn A good haiku; seasonal; present tense.
arid su... Jul 21 09, 02:47 Marc-Andre Germain John,
Thanks for responding. Where is good questi... Jul 21 09, 03:26 Marc-Andre Germain John,
Thanks for coming back. I'm glad to he... Jul 21 09, 06:37 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi marc,
Interesting "poodle/noodle" se... Jul 21 09, 08:59 
Marc-Andre Germain Thanks for the visit, Peggy. Nope, I am not advoca... Jul 21 09, 09:10 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Marc,
I'm sorry I offended you by critiqui... Jul 21 09, 14:45 Marc-Andre Germain Peggy,
The American haiku...I've posted these... Jul 21 09, 20:52 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Marc,
I wouldn't be discouraged in mid-sum... Jul 21 09, 21:17 Marc-Andre Germain Peggy,
It's always summer here, but monsoon k... Jul 21 09, 21:53 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Marc,
Sounds like you live near Vancouver... Jul 21 09, 21:58 Marc-Andre Germain Hi Peggy,
I used to live in Vancouver, almost two... Jul 22 09, 03:33 prerna bala you have a season which is summer, and the Oak whi... Jul 22 09, 05:18 2 User(s) are reading this topic (2 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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