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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 11,717 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in.  |
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Three young men who bred cattle in France Chose a name for their place, not by chance. So as not to confuse, A small pun they did use; Which explained everything at a glance L5 did read: For they felt it explained at a glance ___________________________________________ *footnote removed - If you need an explanation, look at Mark's post! ·······  ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner       |
  
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi Larry et al,
I tend to favor Accentual-syllabic patterns - usualy in tetrameter. I think its often safer when a novice counts syllables, then we can build on the educational aspects of metrical differences.  Larry, what a fun limerick!  I'm not convinced though there isn't another more informative title out there waiting to be used here, lol? Three young men who bred cattle in France Chose a name for their place, not by chance. So as not to confuse, A small pun they did use; For they felt it explained at a glance. I suggest a small edit in the closing line: Explanatations were found, at a glance. Enjoyed! ~Cleo 
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Larry Focus Jun 11 09, 10:57 
Marc-Andre Germain Larry,
I'm afraid that this didn't make i... Jun 11 09, 11:49 Larry Hi Mark,
Yes, I know it is a Limerick and not a H... Jun 11 09, 15:02 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Larry,
I'm afraid this is too complex for ... Jun 11 09, 17:49 
Marc-Andre Germain Peggy,
In accentual-syllabic poetry, we count by... Jun 11 09, 19:42 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi,
Thanks for the review!!! Sometim... Jun 11 09, 19:54 Larry Hello Peggy & Hi again Mark,
Peggy, I appreci... Jun 12 09, 00:53 Marc-Andre Germain Peggy, I love Shakespeare, I think we'll have ... Jun 12 09, 04:49 Larry Hi Lori,
QUOTE Larry, what a fun limerick! I... Jun 12 09, 10:28 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Larry,
Finally I get the puns! I think yo... Jun 12 09, 11:55 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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