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 Apr 3 09, 07:21
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 Babylonian  Posts: 64 Joined: 2-April 09 From: Beautiful Brooklyn NY Member No.: 773 Real Name: Michael Pollack Writer of: Poetry  |
again the circle's drawing near to full
frail shrunken withered being lying there within herself first felt the fetal pull as one we were till birthed in light and air and now my turn to feed the one who fed and now my turn to lift who first held me and now my turn to lead the one's who led as spiral time and life as needs-must be Michael in Brooklyn ·······  ·······anything which does not kill me makes me stronger
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Apr 4 09, 08:43
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hello Michael in Brooklyn,
 What a fascinating poem!  In yourfirst stanza, I enjoy how you describe life coming full circle. The description of mother feeling that first pull and the unity/bond of mother and infant is spectacular. In S2, I can almost taste the responsibility in your words of now the narrator becoming the 'parent' and the change of hands. Well done! Enjoyed the read. ~Cleo 
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
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mike in brooklyn Thanks Clio for the read and the response - much a... Apr 4 09, 12:03 ohsteve Mike, an interesting perspective of the cycle of l... Apr 4 09, 12:40 Eisa Hi Mike
This is a very moving read for me, bringi... Apr 4 09, 16:11 mike in brooklyn So nice to meet you Steve and Eira - and thanks mu... Apr 4 09, 17:02 Aphrodite Hello Mike,
Such a deeply passionate poem with so... Apr 4 09, 17:48 
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