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 Greek  Posts: 698 Joined: 29-May 06 From: US East Coast Member No.: 185 Real Name: Peggy Harwood Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:just wandered in  |
Abelard's Passion (Revision 2)
Ignorance castrates, but passion is forever, beyond death itself. Peggy Carpenter Harwood Abelard's Passion (Revision 1) Hate castrated him, but passion is forever- beyond death itself. Peggy Carpenter Harwood Abelard's Passion Evil castrates him, but passion is forever- beyond death itself. Peggy Carpenter Harwood ·······  ······· |
  
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Yes, a fascinating poem for sure!!!!
 Peggy, not sure if you are a stickler to the form, but now L1 has only 4 syllables, but Larry's suggestion would fix that line: Castrated by hate Cheers ~Cleo 
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Peggy Carpenter Harwood Abelard's Passion (Revision 2) Dec 23 08, 14:47 
Cleo_Serapis An interesting metaphor here Peggy with your use o... Dec 27 08, 16:52 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Cleo,
The Abelard and Heloise story is an old ... Dec 27 08, 17:57 Cleo_Serapis Hey Peggy,
It certainly is a fascinating story, o... Dec 28 08, 08:15 ohsteve Peggy, a very interesting story, seems like there ... Jan 9 09, 13:07 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Steve,
Thanks so much for reading and respondi... Jan 9 09, 13:32 Larry Hi Peggy,
A couple of suggestions and some inform... Jan 12 09, 19:22 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Larry,
Thanks so much for sharing Abelard... Jan 12 09, 19:48 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Cleo,
Thanks for catching the missing syllable... Jan 13 09, 07:55 Sekhmet Hello Peggy - Thank you for reminding us of the tr... Mar 8 09, 04:27 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Leonora,
Thank you for the read and the bit of... Mar 8 09, 06:06 Arnfinn G'day Peg,
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Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi John,
It's good to hear from you! Tha... Mar 10 09, 06:45 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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