 Shadows of the Soul, Free verse - or structured? someone please tell me. |
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 Oct 9 08, 06:15
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 783 Joined: 24-July 07 From: South Africa Member No.: 457 Real Name: Walter Schwim Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Mistral  |
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Oct 9 08, 15:51
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 11,270 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
Hi Thoth!
I don't know whether I should be replying, since you ask for clarification on FV or structure! And I can't recognize any but the usual forms, things like sonnets, villanelles & Swap Quatrains.... and they give me a hell of a lot of trouble to write. Nonetheless, apart from the beautiful profoundness of your poem, I humbly suggest that it does have structure, unknown to me in name. I notice that each L1 has 5 syllables, and your last stanza has 5 lines. Your L2's and L6's, and L5 in the last S, have 10 sylls. I'm afraid I got called away at that point, but when I came back and read your poem over again, it really seems to have rhyme & form, although I believe some lines thereafter don't tally with the above sort of count. So I'll come back after you've had other comments, without first saying that this is a beauty, I really love the psychological exploration throughout, the fondness and sadness and nostalgia, plus the striking finale. Thanks for sharing, I'm looking forward to what the experts say! Syl*** You're one yourself, of course! ······· ·······Mis temas favoritos
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Thoth Shadows of the Soul Oct 9 08, 06:15 
Alan Dear Wally,
It is certainly structured, as Syl sa... Oct 9 08, 16:16 ohsteve Wally, this has a definite rhythm to it and a very... Oct 10 08, 12:42 Psyche LOL.... I'd never heard of a silly-bull counte... Oct 12 08, 12:28 Thoth Thank you all for those comments.
This is just som... Oct 13 08, 12:02 
Psyche Good luck, Wally! My good vibes will reach you... Oct 13 08, 12:29 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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