Summers Day [revised 06 Sep] Options

[Arnfinn]

With thanks to Lori.

Revision 18/09/2008


Footsteps: tread gently.
Bees a-buzzzzzzzzzzzz.
Aphids in white jackets.
Flowers; confusion of colour.
A hot summer's breeze-
on my cheek.



Revision 6th September 2008


Footsteps; tread gently,
bees a-buzz,
aphid's in white jackets,
flowers, confusions of colour.

A hot summers breeze-
on my cheek.



REVISION. AS summers day 4/9/2008


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Arnfinn

[Guest_ohsteve_*]

John, hmmm ok I could see it as falling rain, but thats the only subject besides (snow, sleet, hail, all forms of falling water) that would seem to fit this 'form', I am sure you are right but it seems a questionable form. Although I have seen and done shape formed poems, where the letters of the poem make the shape of the object they describe. Hmmm is there such a thing as free verse forms? You make me ponder such strange things John.
Steve