Seduction By Starlight Options

[Eisa]

I have taken a poem I posted on Homer's Homilies some time ago...`Kisses' and changed it into a sonnet... (made it a bit more suggestive too )

Seduction by Starlight  (sonnet)


The curtain’s drawn; a spangled velvet sheet
creates a welcome shade from daylight’s heat.
As seas of slumber surge on earth, the night’s
soft moonbeams dance in dim seductive light.

Bold eyes entice the sky, they wink to flirt;
she fingers silver buttons on his shirt
and proudly flaunts the galaxies of gems
on midnight’s hand. Bright sequins lift her hem
as stellar rays embrace the dark. She sighs
when kisses scatter over sultry skies;
a supernova bursts in rising clouds
a climax of the night … she gasps aloud!

The curtain opens slowly … not to rush
as dawn peeps out the sky begins to blush.




Kisses   (original from HH)


The winking stars caress the night and sigh
as diamond clusters kiss the blackened sky
A spangled curtain covers earth below,
creating velvet shade from daylight’s glow.

As moonbeams dance to lull us into dreams
they merge with soft seductive light, and beam
embracing rays across the shadowed land
to flaunt the bands of gems on midnight’s hand.  

The sky exudes romance and gasps aloud
when kisses scatter over darkened cloud.
A sleepy moon appeals to night. " Ssh... hush!"
As dawn begins to peep, the sky will blush.

Snow, I've removed an odd "space at the start of line 8. Hope you don't mind ! Alan

[Cleo_Serapis]

Hi Snow!

What a wonderful surprise!    
Isn't it neat to take a poem and create another from the ideas bursting forth?
This is a wonderful sonnet and really, I wouldn't change anything!

Pretty!  
Cleo  

Seduction by Starlight  (sonnet)

The curtain’s drawn; a spangled velvet sheet
creates a welcome shade from daylight’s heat.
As seas of slumber surge on earth, the night’s
soft moonbeams dance in dim seductive light.
Lovely opening!

Bold eyes entice the sky, they wink to flirt;
she fingers silver buttons on his shirt
and proudly flaunts the galaxies of gems
on midnight’s hand. Bright sequins lift her hem
as stellar rays embrace the dark. She sighs
when kisses scatter over sultry skies;
a supernova bursts in rising clouds
a climax of the night … she gasps aloud!
AWESOME imagery!

The curtain opens slowly … not to rush
as dawn peeps out the sky begins to blush.