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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 2,587 Joined: 9-August 03 From: Australia Member No.: 17 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry  |
With thanks to Lori.
 Revision 18/09/2008 Footsteps: tread gently. Bees a-buzzzzzzzzzzzz. Aphids in white jackets. Flowers; confusion of colour. A hot summer's breeze- on my cheek. Revision 6th September 2008 Footsteps; tread gently, bees a-buzz, aphid's in white jackets, flowers, confusions of colour. A hot summers breeze- on my cheek. REVISION. AS summers day 4/9/2008 summers day st r o ll i ng t h r o u gh t h e g a r d en i n s e c t s m o v i ng w o r k i ng d id y ou h e ar t h at? h e a r w h at! t h e . . . h o t b r ee z e S N I FF I NG i neeeeeeeeeeeeeeeever promised YYYYYYYYYYYYYou a Rose Garden.  john Summers Day S t r o ll i n g t h r o u g h t h e g a r d e n, i n s e c t s m o v i n g, w o r k i n g. Did you hear that? Hear what! T h e h o t b r ee z e S N I F F I N G... Arnfinn ·······  ·······Arnfinn
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Sep 5 08, 02:36
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 2,587 Joined: 9-August 03 From: Australia Member No.: 17 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry |
Fair dinkum, Sylv,
I'll do a revision and repost in the other forum as a Tanka.  DOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO you get the feeling that I've been ignoring you lately. Not ment tooooo. Been busy,  John
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Sep 5 08, 09:18
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 10,201 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
Absolutely, John, I've even contemplated going into a nunnery.
Tanka? Gee...with you aussies one never knows nothin', go ahead & give us a break over here...LOL.... See ya, hopefully before I take my vows, Syl*** QUOTE (Arnfinn @ Sep 5 08, 10:36 ) [snapback]110304[/snapback] Fair dinkum, Sylv,
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The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner       |
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Arnfinn Summers Day [revised 06 Sep] Sep 3 08, 01:14 
ohsteve John, Hmmm is this a new advangarde form of freeve... Sep 3 08, 09:44 Psyche Had to put my head sideways, Arnie! `Hope ... Sep 3 08, 10:41 Arnfinn Hi Steve,
This poem follows the same theme as a ... Sep 4 08, 06:05 Arnfinn Hey By the time you return....................Th... Sep 4 08, 06:09 Psyche Gee, Arnie, it's even more difficult to read n... Sep 4 08, 10:12 
Arnfinn Hi, Sylv,
Nunnery,
He,he, I knows the universal... Sep 6 08, 02:18 ohsteve John, hmmm ok I could see it as falling rain, but ... Sep 7 08, 14:59 Arnfinn How are ya Steve?
Nah, I've passed the falli... Sep 9 08, 05:06 Eisa Oh my John - how this poem has changed from its or... Sep 13 08, 18:34 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi John,
I agree with Snow. This poem certainly ... Sep 13 08, 21:27 Cleo_Serapis Hi John,
This was the original inspiration for y... Sep 14 08, 14:07 Arnfinn Hi Snow,
Thank you.
Looks like I've a bit of... Sep 18 08, 01:58 Arnfinn Hi, Peg,
Yep, I suppose, everything in the garde... Sep 18 08, 02:05 Arnfinn Hi Lori,
You know whatttt, Lori?
Yoooooooooooo... Sep 18 08, 02:44 
Cleo_Serapis mate!
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