 When Mourning Dawns, an older poem of mine |
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 Nov 22 07, 18:13
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 Nomad  Posts: 12 Joined: 1-September 03 From: Mississippi Member No.: 24 Real Name: Poppy Writer of: Poetry  |
When Mourning Dawns
All day your name has been against my mind and hurt me like the too frail loveliness of pear blooms in the rain. All night my voice undefined has swung from star to star to call you back. Tomorrow I will know that you can't come and after that I won't know anything but small hard shells against my bare feet and sand upon my lips at dawn. *Just trying to get back into the groove of posting my work and commenting on the work of others, figured this would be a good place to start.* ·······  ·······~Poppy~
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Nov 23 07, 06:31
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi Poppy,
Wow - this is pretty intense for a 3 verse poem! It's nice to read your poetry again!  It certainly echoes of a lost love of sorts, a deep hurt or longing that cannot be quenched, and the contemplation of life afterwards without this person. This is filled with lots of expression in so few lines. I really enjoy this stanza: All night my voice undefined has swung from star to star to call you back. Cheers ~Cleo 
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner           |
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MissLuckyPenny When Mourning Dawns Nov 22 07, 18:13 
Merlin Hello Poppy,
Tis a good place to be.
I don't ... Nov 22 07, 22:28 MissLuckyPenny Thank you, Merlin and Lori, for the kind comments... Nov 23 07, 15:42 Aphrodite Hi Poppy,
This is a very touching and melancholy ... Nov 25 07, 09:25 Xanadu This was a nice read. Only a couple of pics. The f... Nov 25 07, 14:33 4rum MissLuckyPenny;
(love that name)
There was a pe... Nov 27 07, 09:56 Eisa Hi Poppy - It's a real treat to read your work... Jan 5 08, 11:41 jgdittier Dear Miss Lucky Penny,
How close your poem here ap... Sep 20 08, 06:48 Viking Poppy
Don't know if you remember me from Poem... Dec 1 15, 20:53 
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