August 2007 IBPC Nominations, September Competition Options

[Cleo_Serapis]

Hello,

I'd like to nominate Mistral's Enchanted Forest for it's gentle style, imagery and rhythms.

~Cleo


Enchanted Forest by Mistral

Mystical trees in silhouette
against a starlit moon;
luminous, the scattered beams -
beguilingly they're strewn.
Casting soft, a speckled glow
on shrubs and gentle stream
where lovers lie, entangled there,
immersed within a dream.

Dappled moonlight's glimmering
reflects in loving eyes,
wispy breeze through lucent trees
bequeaths contented sighs.
Spellbound forest moulding here
this perfect lover’s nest,
where doubts and insecurities
are gently laid to rest.

[AMETHYST]

I would like to nominate Lovers Meet Again for the skill and creativity that demonstrates to the fullest a 'his side/her side' point of veiw. The dramatic tone enhances the scene and inner turmoil, fustrations and pains of each side. I felt this poem paints that often unseen third side ... the truth ... without ever saying so ... it allows the reader to relate to either side or both sides and emphasizes how cloudy perception can crumble a strong foundation... The use of poetic tools are masterful, it reads smooth and pleasing to the ear, with wonderful sounds that soften the angst within the dialog...


Lovers Meet Again by heartsong7
Two Views

Hers:

I watched you wrapping life in fantasy
until you lost yourself in make-believe.
Appearances took precedence and we
soon parted. I still wonder—did you grieve
to wake and find me gone? No way I'd leave
the man you used to be. Today I know
too much has come between, we won't retrieve
the newness of a love we both let go.
It's time to travel on with memories in tow.


His:

It’s true, I’d hide behind a fantasy,
imagining some day you would believe
a prince had won your heart but, sadly, we
were far too far apart; it’s that I grieve.
The maybes topped with what-ifs made you leave
and left me lost in all I didn’t know.
If fate allows one chance, we could retrieve
the remnants of our love. Don't let it go
to perish, pulled apart by pride’s strong undertow.

This post has been edited by Cleo_Serapis: Sep 3 07, 07:06

Reason for edit: Final Revision