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MM's IBPC Noms and selections for November Comp, No Poll Required, one was declined to send |
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Oct 15 09, 18:28
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Mosaic Master
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From: Massachusetts
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Real Name: Lori Kanter
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Referred By:Imhotep
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I'd like to nominate Leo's poem, A British Squaddie's Lament as it is a stunning portrait of war; one that should receive a wider audience IMHO. Please have a read yourself. Good luck, Leo! ~Cleo A British Squaddie's Lament by Leo WyattNotes: Post Traumatic Distress Disorder (PTDD). The good villagers of Wotton Basset line the streets almost every day, to welcome,'home' the bodies of our young soldiers killed in Iraq and Afghanistan. Most of these daily deaths are caused by the detonation of IUD's – Improvised Underground Devices. 'Squaddie', is the popular name given to our ordinary serving soldiers, and is used with a certain amount of pride by most people in UK. Not all squaddies are saints – but many are Heroes. I'll feel no more the heat of the sun; nor Serg'nt Major's sudden rages; now my bloody legs have gone; paid the price of Battle's wages. Khaki lads and girls, foresee lives destroyed by PTDD. I'll hear no more my Nation's cry; nor Politicians' brave urging. Now I lay me down to die - rag-heads need our purging. Queen and Country, I foresee won't give a damn for PTDD. I'll heed no more, in flashback form, my best mate's fragmentation. They hide them well – those IUD's, all, primed for disintegration. Wooten Basset will never see those coming home with PTDD. No 'friendly' Exocets harm me! Nor no Napalm embalm me! Ghosts unlaid, I abjure thee, to come not near me. Quiet convalescence have. And honourèd be his grave.
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Oct 16 09, 01:24
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Group: Platinum Member
Posts: 743
Joined: 3-February 09
From: Abingdon, Oxfordshire,UK
Member No.: 754
Real Name: Leonora Wyatt
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:No one at all
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Dear Cleo - I thank you most humbly for this nomination, and I am absolutely delighted that, 'Squaddie' found your favour - but feel that it would be inappropriate to accept this competition nomination for two separate reasons. First - as I confessed in my description of the poem, (To be found under the title.) 'I have leaned heavily on Shakespeare's, 'Fear No More the Heat of the Sun.' to write this'. So - I owe my inspiration, form, and even some reworked phrases to Good Old Will. Secondly, it would not feel right to gain in any way, (even poetically) from the writing of a lament for the deaths, and the horrific injuries sustained by our young men and women serving in Iraq. I have been so pleased by the nomination - but sorry - I don't think I will accept it. Many. many thanks, Leo .
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Oct 16 09, 05:41
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Mosaic Master
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From: Massachusetts
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Real Name: Lori Kanter
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Referred By:Imhotep
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Hi Leo, I can completely understand your reservations. I do hope more read this poem (when dsurfing our site) so it can receive a wider audience. Best wishes, ~Cleo
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Oct 20 09, 19:02
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Mosaic Master
Group: Administrator
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From: Massachusetts
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Real Name: Lori Kanter
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Referred By:Imhotep
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Hello, I'd like to nominate JustDaniel's English Sonnet, My Book for the next IBPC competition. I found this remarkable, and after several reads, love the twist when I realized it was a 'match'... Very clever! Good luck! ~Cleo My Book by Daniel J Ricketts, Sr.The jacket on my book is soiled and worn but it's as special now as on the day you gave it to me. It has long adorned the shelf beside the window to the bay. An ordinary child would probably have lost it long ago; I wasn't one: I heard you say so often -- notably a bird-brain. Hearing that was never fun. I cried a lot and often beat my head against the wall to take away the pain, but nothing seemed to help like jam and bread with peanut butter; I'm okay again. That day, spilt gasoline all over me, you handed me the book, Light one and see.© MLee Dickens'son 14 Aug 2009
constructed around 10 words from Donald Justice's Counting the Mad: jacket, day, long, window, ordinary, one, bird, cried, wall, bread
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Oct 21 09, 07:39
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Group: Gold Member
Posts: 19,117
Joined: 2-August 03
From: Southwest New Jersey, USA
Member No.: 6
Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr.
Writer of: Poetry
Referred By:Lori
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Thank you so much for the surprise nomination, Lori. I've never written a sonnet quite like this one. It is a bit quirky, isn't it! But I've met this person and others like him. Some lived with us. deLighting in and accepting the possibility of nomination, Daniel
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Oct 28 09, 14:36
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Ornate Oracle
Group: Praetorian
Posts: 9,312
Joined: 27-August 04
From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia
Member No.: 78
Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:David Ting
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I would like to nominate Wally's poem, The Legacy.
The fantasy quality, sea imagery, inner rhymes and word usage are, to my mind, beautiful.
Syl***The Legacy by Walter SchwimA Kiss, stolen between the land and sea, with spray - salty on your lips and sand, slipping through our fingers, building tiny stalagmites for laughing children. Silken Hair, restless as the wind and waves, washing treasures to our tingling feet and your eyes that boldly rob the ocean of its fire while Poseidon roars inside his cowry shell. Sunshine, warm on sanguine skin, lungs filled with virgin air - un-breathed, in a green forest, resting within my soul. Your Smile, cascading naked over marbled pebbles, claiming my heart as the mountain murmurs blackly beneath our unshod feet. These, I'd take with me. Soil, steeped in blood, inherited with sweat; a lifetime’s toil for fledgling fiscal dreams and prayers - ever unfulfilled. Promises - made in faith, broken in sickness and in fear of foe and fate. Curved sWords, fired in anger at vulnerable emotions; parried with semi-truths and deception, finally manoeuvring into shadow. These, (and sorrow’s Tear as well) I gladly bequeath to those – who stay. © Walter Schwim 22 October 2009
This post has been edited by Cleo_Serapis: Nov 2 09, 06:34
Reason for edit: Revised version posted
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Mis temas favoritos The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you.
"There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction."
Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!MM Award Winner
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Oct 28 09, 14:48
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Ornate Oracle
Group: Praetorian
Posts: 9,312
Joined: 27-August 04
From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia
Member No.: 78
Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:David Ting
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I would like to nominate Bev's poem, She for the November IBPC comp.
I think it's a striking poem (turns out she'd had a bout of shingles...poor thing!), but it's a great piece on the subject of pain, to which many of us can identify...mmm..... Pain can really disable one, ask Liz if she's around!
Anyway, there go my 2 + 2 cents for the IBPC!!
Syl***She by Beverleigh Gail AnnegarnShe arrived in the night hauling her basket of agony. Slowly, she unpacked her heinous wares next to my bed then thrust her needles and swords, sharp and piercing into my flesh. She dragged barbed wire across my back, until I cried, but still did not stop. Then continued to stab the wounds, leaving them suppurating. Desperately I searched… respite did not come. She moves with me, depleting energy, rendering me spiritless. I am at her mercy. Copyright © September 2009, Beverleigh Annegarn
This post has been edited by Cleo_Serapis: Oct 30 09, 09:55
Reason for edit: Revised version posted
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Mis temas favoritos The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you.
"There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction."
Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!MM Award Winner
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Oct 28 09, 15:42
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Group: Gold Member
Posts: 783
Joined: 24-July 07
From: South Africa
Member No.: 457
Real Name: Walter Schwim
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:Mistral
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Dear Sylvia, Thank for the nomination, it probably still needs a few tweeks and my FF is still formative. I am honored. Hugs, Wally 1. Are you the original author of this poem? Yes 2. Has this poem ever been published? No 3. Has this poem been nominated by any other participating board (of IBPC)? No 4. Has this poem been reviewed as "best and final" to assure the latest revision is judged? Not yet 5. Is your email address on file up to date (what is it)? yes - thothofafrica@yahoo.com 6. Do you accept the nomination to submit the work (if selected to represent MM)? Yes 7. If yes to above question, what is your real name? Walter Schwim
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Oct 28 09, 15:52
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Mosaic Master
Group: Administrator
Posts: 18,892
Joined: 1-August 03
From: Massachusetts
Member No.: 2
Real Name: Lori Kanter
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:Imhotep
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Wally! Just le me know by Monday if you'll have any revisions to this piece. Best of luck! ~Lori
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Oct 29 09, 08:38
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Group: Gold Member
Posts: 1,621
Joined: 18-August 05
From: Johannesburg, South Africa
Member No.: 127
Real Name: Beverleigh Gail Annegarn
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:Jox
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Congratulations on the Nomination...looks like the African's are taking IBPC on again!
Bev
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Nov 2 09, 01:44
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Group: Gold Member
Posts: 783
Joined: 24-July 07
From: South Africa
Member No.: 457
Real Name: Walter Schwim
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:Mistral
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Hi Lori,
Here is my Final Revision.
Many thanks,
Hugz, Wally
The Legacy
Final Revision 1 November 2009
A Kiss, stolen between the land and sea, with spray - salty on your lips and sand, slipping through our fingers, building tiny stalagmites for laughing children.
Silken Hair, restless as the wind and waves, washing treasures to our tingling feet and your eyes that boldly rob the ocean of its fire while Poseidon roars inside his cowry shell.
Sunshine, warm on sanguine skin, lungs filled with virgin air - un-breathed, in a green forest, resting within my soul.
Your Smile, cascading naked over marbled pebbles, claiming my heart as the mountain murmurs blackly beneath our unshod feet.
These, I'd take with me.
Soil, steeped in blood, inherited with sweat; a lifetime’s toil for fledgling fiscal dreams and prayers - ever unfulfilled.
Promises - made in faith, broken in sickness and in fear of foe and fate. Curved sWords, fired in anger at vulnerable emotions; parried with semi-truths and deception, finally manoeuvring into shadow.
These, (and sorrow’s Tear as well) I gladly bequeath to those – who stay.
© Walter Schwim 22 October 2009
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Nov 2 09, 06:35
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Mosaic Master
Group: Administrator
Posts: 18,892
Joined: 1-August 03
From: Massachusetts
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Real Name: Lori Kanter
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:Imhotep
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Thanks Wally! I'll be sending the poems along after I return from work this evening. Best of luck! ~Cleo
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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