Cinquain, Poetic Form Exercise Options

[Cleo_Serapis]

CINQUAIN:  From the French, meaning "a grouping of five."  

The Cinquain has five lines of two, four, six, eight, and two syllables, respectively, with a total syllabic count of 22.

The cinquain should have no more than two full sentences.

The Handbook of Poetic Forms suggests:  Do not add words to fill out this form; write with feeling, but do not allow your writing to become cloyingly sweet; build toward a climax and put a surprise into your last two lines.  Rather than parts of speech, be concerned with thoughts and images.

The cinquain came to popularity by Adelaide Crapsy, who devised the form back in the early 1900's. She was so influenced by the Japanese forms, tanka and haiku, that she developed her own poetic system which she then called cinquain.

The most famous of the few Crapsy cinquains from her The Complete Poems is:

TRIAD

These be
Three silent things:
The falling snow... the hour
Before the dawn... the mouth of one
Just dead.

Cinquains, though they have never become very popular, have always attracted a number of poets who are still developing the form.

Why not try your own here in this thread! Come on! We dare you!    :p

[AMETHYST]

WITH WINGS
HIS FATHER MADE
USING FEATHERS AND WAX
HE TOOK FLIGHT TOWARD THE SUNLIGHT.
MELTED!

[AMETHYST]

Quote  Cleo


Friendships:
blossoming love,
nurturing bonds to last
lifetimes. Surround yourself with friends
and grow.




A wonderful example of a cinquain, Lori ~ it truly holds the key to a happy life as well... with friends on line and off we are never alone!


We grow
in spirit, mind
and heart, when we sow seeds
of trust...honesty and true worth ~
friendships!

[AMETHYST]

WELCOME TO THE CINQUAIN CHALLENGE, WHERE YOU CHALLENGE YOURSELF TO USE YOUR WORDS WISELY...

A CINQUAIN IS ONE OF THE POETIC FORMS THAT USES SET RULES.

THE RULES ARE:
5 LINES WITH A SET SYLLABLE COUNT.
LINE 1: 2 SYLLABLES
LINE 2: 4 SYLLABLES
LINE 3: 6 SYLLABLES
LINE 4: 8 SYLLABLES
LINE 5: 2 SYLLABLES

ALTHOUGH YOU CAN BE AS CREATIVE AS YOU DESIRE...THERE ARE VARIATIONS ON SOME GUIDELINES.

YOUR ENDING LINE MIGHT BE A PLAY ON THE FIRST LINE TO SUM UP THE POEM. YOU MIGHT LIKE TO TRY IT USING A SET METER OR RHYME SCHEME. THERE ARE MANY WAYS TO GROW WITH CINQUAINS TO HELP YOU EXERCISE OTHER POETIC SKILLS AND TECHNIQUES. ENJOY YOUR FLIGHT AND PERHAPS WE MIGHT EVEN TOUCH THE SUN~


EXAMPLE:

WITH WINGS
HIS FATHER MADE
USING FEATHERS AND WAX
HE TOOK FLIGHT TOWARD THE SUNLIGHT.
MELTED!


OK THAT'S NOT TOO GOOD BUT GIVE IT A TRY:

[Cleo_Serapis]

Thanks Amethyst! :)

I LOVE a challenge!  

OK here goes:


Friendships:
blossoming love,
nurturing bonds to last
lifetimes. Surround yourself with friends
and grow.

[AMETHYST]

Friendships:
blossoming love,
nurturing bonds to last
lifetimes. Surround yourself with friends
and grow.

A wonderful example of a cinquain, Lori ~ it truly holds the key to a happy life as well... with friends on line and off we are never alone!


We grow
in spirit, mind
and heart, when we sow seeds
of trust...honesty and true worth ~
friendships!

[Cleo_Serapis]

Rose Buds;
petals unwrap
frangrant bouquets of life
revealing beautiful treasures
within.

Angels;
behest His love.
Seldom seen, always felt,
everlasting serenity.
Guide us.

[Cleo_Serapis]

Hi Liz...I know this is a pain and I'm working on a resolution...

BUT if you'd like to center your text...

Use < > and put the word center inside followed by the /center <> inside as well...

Cheers!
Lori ???  ???

[Cleo_Serapis]

A wonderful example of a cinquain, Lori ~ it truly holds the key to a happy life as well... with friends on line and off we are never alone!


We grow
in spirit, mind
and heart, when we sow seeds
of trust...honesty and true worth ~
friendships!

Thanks Liz!  :)

What an awesome response here you've posted as well! I love the theme here we've started in this thread thus far!  :love:

Hugs..

[Cleo_Serapis]

 :juggle:

Daybreak.
Wakens creatures
to it's gleaming landscapes.
Reminding us to find Beauty
in all.

[JustDaniel]

to youse used ewes:

Two ewes
commiserate
about a bygone ram –
on all the things he couldn’t give
a dam.

© Daniel J Ricketts 14 Oct 2003

[Guest__*]

Dear Daniel

Another derlicious joke from you, but not a cinquain !

Two ewes 2
commiserate 4
about bygone ram – 5 only - make it "about their bygone ram" ?
on all the things he couldn’t give
a dam.

Love
Alan

[JustDaniel]

Dear Daniel

Another derlicious joke from you, but not a cinquain !

Two ewes 2
commiserate 4
about bygone ram – 5 only - make it "about their bygone ram" ?
on all the things he couldn’t give
a dam.

Love
Alan

Dear Alan,

Do please remember that this is an exercise forum, and in such a place we play with and experiment with the form.  You'll easily see that my CINQUAIN simply fell victim to a typo.  Kindly leave room for that, rather than declaring it not to BE a cinquain?  Fair enough?

Ever seen a cinquain train.  Why not write one beginning with the last two syllables of the last one posted.  It's great practice.  

Here is an example (including the correction of the typo):

Two ewes
commiserate
about a bygone ram –
on all the things he couldn’t give
a dam

© Daniel J Ricketts 14 Oct 2003

A dam
( Song says it’s so! )
cannot so long withstand
against one optimistic ram
Eye’m butt!

I’m but
a silly bard
who mayhaps should be barred
from writing out his silliness
like this.

Like this?
Then add cinquain
or even two or three:
begin yours with the final word
of mine.

© Daniel J Ricketts 16 Oct 2003

[Guest__*]

Dear Daniel

Sorry, don't understand. What was the typo ?

I was, while admiring the content, pointing out that the one rule that exists for the cinquain, the 2,3,6,8,2, was breached. I also offered a solution which was very close to the one you took.

Didn't mean to "miff" you. Look at the total number of my posts on yours and you will see that I am a fervent admirer !

Love
Alan

[Michelle]

Hey Daniel,

I miss your presence here.
And you've left a dandy
last line to start.  lol

Ok, here goes,


Of mine
and yours, the world
turns blue with jealousy,
for it offers nothing better
than us.

[JustDaniel]

Dear Daniel

Sorry, don't understand. What was the typo ?

[ I'd simply left out the 'a' ! ]

I was, while admiring the content, pointing out that the one rule that exists for the cinquain, the 2,3,6,8,2, was breached. I also offered a solution which was very close to the one you took.

[ Now, Alan, see how easy it is to make a typo?  I'm certainly not going to 'correct' you by telling you that your cinquain rules are wrong.  You just nade a simple typo!  I know that you meant 4, not 3 for the second line, right?  *smile* ]

Didn't mean to "miff" you. [You didn't!  I was just reminding you a courtesy, my friend.  *smile* ] Look at the total number of my posts on yours and you will see that I am a fervent admirer !

[ I've been pressed for time of late and cannot be much in the critique forums as I'd like.  I have so much to do in 'real life' before my December operation. I miss participating there! ]

Love
Alan

Blessings to ewe and Iore's *smile*
deLightedly, Daniel  

[JustDaniel]

Hey Daniel,

I miss your presence here.
And you've left a dandy
last line to start.  lol

[ Some lines are connected to sinkers! ]

Ok, here goes,


Of mine
and yours, the world
turns blue with jealousy,
for it offers nothing better
than us.

[ Your closer is a bit tough too! ]

Thunnus —
takes a genus
to scale off its meaning,
but opens no can of worms — just
tuna!

© Daniel J Ricketts 25 Oct 2003

sLightly fishy, Daniel  

[Michelle]

Ahhh Daniel,

I knew you could do it!  lol
and with such ingenuity!
(you must come from the Great NW - teehee)

Okay, I won't leave such a horrible last line
this time.  

Tuna?
The cactus pear
or albacore delight?
A prickly touch or succulent
sandwich?

[Guest__*]

DINNER TIME

Sandwich
course provides lunch.
Then dinner's set for six,
even though there are just the two
of us .....

(based on an old Spike Milligan joke)

Alan McAlpine Douglas

[JustDaniel]

Hey, Alan!  I've just composed this one to segue into the second one that I wanted to post here:

of us
who might you think
would be most difficult
when all has been said and done to
fathom

Now for the second one:

fathom
pro fun ditty
with arms outstretched six feet
and you’ll embrace hexameter
I’mb tolled

© Daniel J Ricketts 26 Oct 2003

fadin' in de Light, Daniel  

[Guest__*]

"Iamb de Master" - Daniel

I'mb tolled
you are master
of all de wit, de whoo;
'old de light - owl of all de time
dat be !

Alan McAlpine Douglas

[JustDaniel]

"Iamb de Master" - Daniel

I'mb tolled
you are master
of all de wit, de whoo;
'old de light - owl of all de time
dat be !

© Alan McAlpine Douglas

Dat be
some compliment;
could be left – handed
back as a complement cinquain
ya think?

© Daniel J Ricketts 26 Oct 2003

Sandwiched in ryely with mayo Lightly, Daniel  

[Guest__*]

"Sandwiched in ryely with mayo Lightly" : Daniel

Sandwiched
pastmastrami
in ryely with mayo
poetic cannibals devour
De Light !

Alan

[JustDaniel]

"Sandwiched in ryely with mayo Lightly" : Daniel

Sandwiched
pastmastrami
in ryely with mayo
poetic cannibals devour
De Light !

Alan

sub weigh-inn

mayo
spread with de Light
till you’ve mustard relish
a-salting deli berated
cinquains

© Daniel J Ricketts 27 Oct 2003

[Guest__*]

Sub Lime'n'All

Dearly
Berated, we
are gathered here to toast
lightly wry wit of the Master :
Dan, y'all !

Alan McAlpine Douglas

PS. Daniel, how DO you keep it up ?  :juggle:

[JustDaniel]

Sub Lime'n'All

Dearly
Berated, we
are gathered here to toast
lightly wry wit of the Master :
Dan, y'all !

Alan McAlpine Douglas

PS. Daniel, how DO you keep it up ?  

On the Up and Down

I ain't
touchin' that one
... not with a ten inch pole!
this agora ain't fer vyin'
methinks.

Methinks
Niagra Falls
might be a better place;
it’s just water over the edge.
I ain’t.

© M Lee Dickens’ son 27 Oct 2003

[Michelle]

I ain't
complainin' guys,
just without a prattle
in rapid streams of consciousness,
smilin'.

[JustDaniel]

I ain't
complainin' guys,
just without a prattle
in rapid streams of consciousness,
smilin'.

smilin'
oar nauti-gal,
could white-water scandal
rune yore nocturnal said-'e-meant's?
Rock on!

sLightly askew, Daniel  

[Michelle]

Rock on,
stone and pummel,
cast chips of Rosetta,
through panes; horizons hide stumbling
block-aides.

[Michelle]

Blockades
explode skyward,
dust barren land of mind
with a skiff inspiration - words
advance.

[Guest_Dove_*]

Blockades
explode skyward,
dust barren land of mind
with a skiff inspiration - words
advance.

Back-fence Gossip


Advance
with loud whispers,
ask with rude courtesy
and slip a coffee-stained number
to me.

[Michelle]

Excellent Dove!

I'm so glad you've joined.
This one is piercing - I love it!

You've left a great line to start on too.
I'm supprised I get the opportunity.



To me
the hand jester
is a string-less puppet
gone amuck; a show without plot,
nonsense.

[Cybele]

Hi Michelle,

I have just found this thread and think it is great fun. Not sure I've got the gist yet, but I'll have a try. This happen two days ago.

Trapped bird
In the chimney
All hands to the rescue
Don’t panic little one. Oh no!
Soot trail!

[Guest__*]

Dear Grace

Nice little story.

You've almost got the hang - cinquain is

2
4
6
8
2

so your 6 is one syll short !

Also, a game seems to have developed to use the last 2 sylls of the prev post to start the new one.


Suit rail
hang one, hang all
in line, creased and creaseless
ready now to rock and roll .... and
be wrecked

Love
Alan

[Cybele]

Good Morning Sir Knight

Thanks for the help Alan. All fixed.

Be wrecked hm?
Could you have found anything harder?  Will dwell on this for a while

Love

Grace  :sun:

[Guest__*]

Dear Grace

Like it !

Sorry about the "wrecked", I had failed to consider those following on.

Be wrecked,
and be wretched,
p'raps even be wasted,
my boy, and you will have tasted
the dregs .....

How's that to follow LOL ?

Love
Alan

[Cybele]

Hey there Alan,

Not very inspired. I still have to get the hang of this:

The dregs
In the bottle
Like the mulled remnants of
my past hedonistic heydays…
I WISH

Next please  

Love

Grace

[Guest__*]

Dear Grace

If this one is not inspired, then I look forward to those that are. This had me LOL !

I wish
that a cinquain
were as easy to write
as a Shakespearian sonnet
dashed off !

Love
Alan

[Cybele]

Hello again Alan  :knight:

Aah! Now you're talking. MY HERO (Shakespeare that is.)    :jester:

Dashed off
straight from the quill
to the parchment, ink-flecked.
Will’s impatient, teeming brain
flying

Love

Grace

[Michelle]

Hi Grace,
that's an excellent cinquain.

These are so addicting, aren't they?  




Flying
south for winter,
goose and gander on wings
of down, follow instinct’s current,
re: quest.

[Guest__*]

Dear Grace and Michelle

Both brilliant !

REQUEST STOP

Request
stop this damn bus
where I want to get off
not odd place approximately
nowhere

Love
Alan

[Guest_Dove_*]

REQUEST STOP

Request
stop this damn bus
where I want to get off
not odd place approximately
nowhere

Scattered

Nowhere,
to anywhere
from yesterday and then
becoming today's present thought;
where now?

[JustDaniel]

Scattered

Nowhere,
to anywhere
from yesterday and then
becoming today's present thought;
where now?

Fill a sofa; call ya, Jessica!  *smile*

Auntie Yup

Where now
you are you’ll stand.
I see:  you’ve posted yours,
and ante’s ceded; wanna bet?
‘tsa deal!

© Daniel J Ricketts 06 Nov 2003

[Guest_Dove_*]

Just Daniel

how many syllables are in 'tsa? i'm not sure how to count it.

[Cybele]

Good Morning everyone.  

Great brain food this  

Tsa deal
The cards of life
I’ll take my six face down
Don’t want no crystal ball to see
my future

Grace

[Guest_Dove_*]

Good Morning everyone.  

Great brain food this  

Tsa deal
The cards of life
I’ll take my six face down
Don’t want no crystal ball to see
my future

Grace

cybele, thank you for saving me from that horrible line! lol

Pick-pocket a Future

My future
lies in your hand.
Trace my love lines and worth;
empty my pockets to predict
your wealth.

[Cybele]

My pleasure Dove  

This is great fun!!

Your wealth
Can never cure
A child’s tears, a child’s fears
Only unconditional love
Does that

[Cybele]

Hello Michelle,

Thank you for the comment.  They surely are ... very addictive.  Seems to have become my morning wake-up exercise.

Love

Grace

[Guest__*]

THE PROBOSCIS CANNOT LIE, BUT IT CAN GROW .....

Does that
nose which he has,
protruding, from his face,
expose his ethnic origins ?
That does .....


Love
Alan

[Cybele]

Good Morning Sir Knight

Nice one Alan, I like it!  :laugh:

A little poetic license required I feel

That doe’s
bright, liquid eyes
express it’s gentle soul
could you sight along a rifle
and fire?

Love

Grace

[JustDaniel]

Just Daniel

how many syllables are in 'tsa? i'm not sure how to count it.

Just one!

How many syllables are in the line: "my future" ?

To count
upon fingers
in this digital age
need have no rhyme nor reason for
cinquains.

© Daniel J Ricketts 07 Nov 2003

[JustDaniel]

Good Morning Sir Knight

Nice one Alan, I like it!  

A little poetic license required I feel

That doe’s
bright, liquid eyes
express it’s gentle soul
could you sight along a rifle
and fire?

Love

Grace

Sat ‘ere in Ambush!

Anne’d fire!
Without a blink
she’d shoot that faun, I think.
She doesn’t like satyrical.
Do you?

© Daniel J Ricketts 07 Nov 2003

[JustDaniel]

Aah! Now you're talking. MY HERO (Shakespeare that is.)    

Dashed off
straight from the quill
to the parchment, ink-flecked.
Will’s impatient, teeming brain
flying

Love

Grace

I couln't pass up your great tribute, Grace! [Missing syllable in L4?]

Here's Myan:

Shakespene

To Will
upon a quill
I’mb quite indebtedly
penned amateur with cagey words
unloosed.

© Daniel J Ricketts 07 Nov 2003

Lightly, Daniel  

[Cybele]

Hey Dan the Man

How many syllables in 'my future'

                er,  three?      

(please don't give me a detention, I want to go out tonight)  

Tsa deal
The cards of life
I’ll take my six face down
Don’t want no crystal ball to see
future

Tatty bye

Grace  

[JustDaniel]

[b]Hey Dan the Man

How many syllables in 'my future'

                er,  three?      

(please don't give me a detention, I want to go out tonight)  

Tsa deal
The cards of life
I’ll take my six face down
Don’t want no crystal ball to see
future

Tatty bye

Grace  

Detention?  De tension is rising?

Feud? Sure!
Do you want one?
Be careful not to lunge;
few’d even notice if we’d spat
mew cuss

© Daniel J Ricketts 07 Nov 2003

Lightly, Daniel  

[Cybele]

Feud? Sure!  VERY NIFTY Daniel

Mew!! Cuss
that dratted cat!
Two shoes and a slipper
Running out of ammunition
Air gun!

Grace  :sun:  :speechless:

[JustDaniel]

Feud? Sure!  VERY NIFTY Daniel

Mew!! Cuss
that dratted cat!
Two shoes and a slipper
Running out of ammunition
Air gun!

Grace    

Do tell, Grace!  This is fun, isn't it?  Care for an apple?  Take a byte of this:

Ere gun

he’d let it fly;

son didn’t live to tell

(How many Tells do you know now?)

he missed!

© Daniel J Ricketts 07 Nov 2003

sLightly off the mark, Daniel  

[Guest__*]

Dear Grace

"Mew!! Cuss
that dratted cat!
Two shoes and a slipper
Running out of ammunition
Air gun!"

had me LOL, which is just what I need less than 1/2 an hour after having 2 tes, count them, 2 ! front bottom teeth out.

I needed it, cuz I need to learn to laugh in a different way LOL !

Love
Alan

PS I LIKE cats .....

PPS added 3 mins later - see, I can't even typo correctly wissou my fron tes !

[Guest__*]

Ecthsthract from a dental epic-sode

He mithed
hith two fron tees
after the ec-stracthion
and had to thpeak peculiar
Englith ....

Love
Alan

[JustDaniel]

Ecthsthract from a dental epic-sode

He mithed
hith two fron tees
after the ec-stracthion
and had to thpeak peculiar
Englith ....

Love
Alan

Hey, Alan!  Rack 'em up!  

Woud you bet your eye teeth on a game o' nein ball?

ein glitch

unless sprechen

quite pe-cu-li-ar-ly.

Pea-cue’ll yearly snooker your side

pockets.

Lightly breakin'... your...

Daniel  

[Guest__*]

Dear Daniel

Ow weh ! Das tut weh !


FLOORED, BY A SIMPLE QUESTION !

Parquet
carpets or tiles
to floor rooms in house
being built in a Spanish style
por que ?

Love
Alan

[Cybele]

Hey Alan

Pork pies!
Three cheers Alan
Novocaine worn off
You can sshtop sshucking sshoup
And get stuck into the goodies
Yippee!

 :dance:  :dance: Love

Grace

[Guest__*]

WHAT ALES THEE, FALSTAFF ?

Yer pie
and yer chips too
yer Cumberland sausage
bacon, eggs, french toast; who needs a
BEER gut ?

Love
Alan

[Cybele]

Tough one Alan,  

Yer pie
and yer chips too
yer Cumberland sausage
bacon, eggs, french toast; who needs a
BEER gut ?

Birgette
Bardot ? Hot stuff!
Quintessential sexpot
Discarded Vadim and Distel
Strange girl!

Grace

[Guest__*]

Dear Grace

Well modified !


WEAKER(MINDED) SEX SURVEY

Strange ? Girl ?
So what is new ?
Does she know what she wants ?
Do I know, what she says she wants,
ain't it ?

Alan McAlpine Douglas

PS Poetic licence used - these are NOT my real opinions, he hastened to add just as the lynch mob started stringing him up .....

[Guest__*]

MODAL'TY FORD

Paint it
"Any Color" Ford,
Had rainbow way with words :
"Paint it black, black, black, paint it black".
So long .....

Alan McAlpine Douglas

PS Def of Modality : "A tendency to conform to a general pattern" !

Daniel, watcha think of that one ? ! ? LOL

[Cybele]

Well done Sir Knight

Good riposte!

A BIENTOT

So long
farewell, adieu
adios amigos, bye
via condios my darlings
au’voir!

Grace

[JustDaniel]

Well done Sir Knight

Good riposte!

A BIENTOT

So long
farewell, adieu
adios amigos, bye
via condios my darlings
au’voir!

Grace

Super pieces, both of you; and what fun!

Grace, your words brought to mind this harsh scene. Please do not think it is meant as a portrayal of the interchanges here!  It's the words that merely triggered thoughts in my demented brain... and yet a not-so-uncommon picture:

Ohhhhhh’d to a Kiss

Au’voir

his glib shoulder

he rejoined ‘er blew eyes

with his cleaver riposte, smearing

Kiss off.

© Daniel J Ricketts 08 Nov 2003

[Guest_Dove_*]

to a Kiss

Au’voir
his glib shoulder
he rejoined ‘er blew eyes
with his cleaver riposte, smearing
Kiss off.

Turtle Race

Kiss off;
Please pause this race.
Slow and steady will work
(Give me the turtle any day.)
life long.

[JustDaniel]

Turtle Race

Kiss off;
Please pause this race.
Slow and steady will work
(Give me the turtle any day.)
life long.

Hey, Jess!    Not sure I understand your last line...
but then you may not understand mine either!  Touché!  

No Contest

Life long
ago became
too hare-raising for him;
rabbit let time and turtle pass
him: bye

© Daniel J Ricketts 08 Nov 2003

Lightly, Daniel  

[Cybele]

Good morning Daniel  

No Contest

Life long
ago became
too hare-raising for him;
rabbit let time and turtle pass
him: bye

Nice take on Aesop (he's hanging about MM somewhere now Dan. Watch out for plagiarism writ!! )  

Meanwhile on Sunday...

Hymn by
S Baring-Gould
‘Onward, Christian Soldiers’
rouses even distracted boys
to sing

Grace  

[JustDaniel]

Good morning Daniel  

No Contest

Life long
ago became
too hare-raising for him;
rabbit let time and turtle pass
him: bye

Nice take on Aesop (he's hanging about MM somewhere now Daniel. Watch out for plagiarism writ!! )  

~ ~ ~
Just a grace note here, Grace:

Aesop
it is fabled
wrote some good moral stuff;
but who really knows if he’d been
a sop?

© Daniel J Ricketts 09 Nov 2003

~ ~ ~

Meanwhile on Sunday...

Hymn by
S Baring-Gould
‘Onward, Christian Soldiers’
rouses even distracted boys
to sing

Grace  

Good morning to you as well, fine Lady Grace!  

Gladly the Cross I’d Bear

To sing
The Cross-Eyed Bear
confused distracted boys
who thought, Who’d write a hymn about
Gladly?

© Daniel J Ricketts 09 Nov 2003

eschewin' snickers, but smilin' like the Milky Way, Daniel  

[Cybele]

Good morning to you as well, fine Lady Grace!  

Gladly the Cross I’d Bear

To sing
The Cross-Eyed Bear
confused distracted boys
who thought, Who’d write a hymn about
Gladly?

[b]Easily confused, young boys Daniel. I speak from experience having had four sons!  :wall:

Very comical. I like!  :rofl:

Glad lay
in bed too long
was five feet six last night
Woke this morning after long stretch
Six nine!

Love

Grace  :cheer:  

[JustDaniel]

[quote=Cybele,Nov. 09 2003, 06:46][quote]Easily confused, young boys, Daniel. I speak from experience having had four sons!  

Very comical. I like!    

Glad lay
in bed too long
was five feet six last night
Woke this morning after long stretch
Six nine!

Love

Grace    [/quote]
Well, Grace... that is either quite a stretch...  or he's VERY TALL!  

‘s Mutt

Sics? Nein!
I would never
have Zoe attack you;
but our part-Chow would love a stretch
abed.

© Daniel J Ricketts 10 Nov 2003

deLightedly heading there myself, shortly, Daniel  

( and looking forward to meeting up with the OTHER Z-man [our own Zeus]  this afternoon [Monday] in North Jersey after a training seminar! )

[Cybele]

Well, Grace... that is either quite a stretch...   or he's VERY TALL!    


‘s Mutt

Sics? Nein!
I would never
have Zoe attack you;
but our part-Chow would love a stretch
abed.

Good Night to you then Dan,    

I’ve just got up!  

HE is a SHE Dan, Glad being short for GLADYS.

A bed
Strewn with roses
Might please your blued-tongued pal
Sweeten her temper, save my hide
From bites!

Sleep well, and give Zeus a bid hug for me. Go on, force yourself!  

Love

Grace
(Wide awake and bright as a button)       :

[JustDaniel]

Well, Grace... that is either quite a stretch...   or he's VERY TALL!    

‘s Mutt

Sics? Nein!
I would never
have Zoe attack you;
but our part-Chow would love a stretch
abed.

Good Night to you then Daniel,    

I’ve just got up!  

HE is a SHE Dan, Glad being short for GLADYS.

[ Ok, Grace... now you've really got my curiosity going!    Who or what is GLADYS?!    ]

A bed
Strewn with roses
Might please your blued-tongued pal
Sweeten her temper, save my hide
From bites!

Sleep well, and give Zeus a bid hug for me. Go on, force yourself!  

[ I don't have trouble with such things... but I don't know what a bid hug is (Is it an E-Bay thing?), so I gave him a regular one. ]

Love

Grace
(Wide awake and bright as a button)  

From bytes

to face-to-face,

we rendezvous again…

Just Daniel ~ Pun hugs M&M ~

Z-man

And we had a great three hours together over dinner!

- Lightly, Daniel  

[Cybele]

Hi Daniel,

Gladys is a girl's name - at least it is over here  ???

Feeling better now?
Sounds like you had a great re-union with Zeus.

From bytes
to face-to-face,
we rendezvous again…
Just Daniel ~ Pun hugs M&M ~
Z-man

back at ya Dan

Reunion

Zee man
Wiz zer sweet tooth?
Re-fought the war with soup?
Put world to rights with main course?
Aah Sweet!

TaTa

Grace  

[JustDaniel]

Hi Daniel,

Gladys is a girl's name - at least it is over here  ???

Feeling better now?
Sounds like you had a great re-union with Zeus.

From bytes
to face-to-face,
we rendezvous again…
Just Daniel ~ Pun hugs M&M ~
Z-man

back at ya Dan

Reunion

Zee man
Wiz zer sweet tooth?
Re-fought the war with soup?
Put world to rights with main course?
Aah Sweet!

TaTa

Grace  

pain de guerre

as wheat
becomes le pain
l'amour est parfois guerre
we’ll not expect to winnow gain
with wind

© Daniel J Ricketts 14 Nov 2003

[Cybele]

Hi Dan,  :wave:

Pain de guerre

as wheat
becomes le pain
l'amour est parfois guerre
we’ll not expect to winnow gain
with wind

La douleur D'amour

with wind
tears dry on cheeks
hiding the sharp heartache
I feel, when love is sometimes war
sweet foe

Grace  :cheer:

[JustDaniel]

Hi Dan,  

La douleur D'amour

with wind
tears dry on cheeks
hiding the sharp heartache
I feel, when love is sometimes war
sweet foe

Grace  

Hey, Gracie!

break-through

Sweet fo
mah gal’s kisses
ah ain’t havin’ no pane
‘tween me an’ them. Out o’ da way;
it’s war!

© Daniel J Ricketts 14 Nov 2003

[Cybele]

Good Morning Dan,  

break-through

Sweet fo
mah gal’s kisses
ah ain’t havin’ no pane
‘tween me an’ them. Out o’ da way;
it’s war!

Profane Macaw

It swore
a sailor’s oath!
A raucous sound, issued
loudly by a techni-coloured
parrot  

Cheery bye

Grace

[JustDaniel]

Good Morning Dan,  

Profane Macaw

It swore
a sailor’s oath!
A raucous sound, issued
loudly by a techni-coloured
parrot  

Cheery bye

Grace

Happy Mourning, Gracie!

too flu outa the caw-caw’s nest

Pair it
up with a crow;
listen to ‘em ravin’
muh caw, muh caw; they’d evermore
caca

© M Lee Dickens’ son 15 Nov 2003

 sLightly affected, Daniel    

[Cybele]

Aah Daniel !

My favourite film!

too flu outa the caw-caw’s nest

Pair it
up with a crow;
listen to ‘em ravin’
muh caw, muh caw; they’d evermore
caca

Didn't ya just love her?

cocka
mamie ideas!
hair-brained schemes from Lucy
according to hubby Desi
Arnaz

Happy Sunday to you Dan, my man  

[JustDaniel]

Aah Daniel !

My favourite film!

too flu outa the caw-caw’s nest

Pair it
up with a crow;
listen to ‘em ravin’
muh caw, muh caw; they’d evermore
caca

Didn't ya just love her?

cocka
mamie ideas!
hair-brained schemes from Lucy
according to hubby Desi
Arnaz

Happy Sunday to you Dan, my man  

wife's and daughters' absolute favorite series:  I Love Lucy

Good morning, Your Grace!

takeaswill


aren’ as

perplexing as

some poetry forms;

one may find cinquain word-twisting

thwilling


© Daniel J Ricketts 16 Nov 2003

[Guest_Dove_*]

aren’ as

perplexing as

some poetry forms;

one may find cinquain word-twisting

thwilling[/font]


© Daniel J Ricketts 16 Nov 2003

Wedding Speech

"Thwilling
I shay it ish!"
Too bad his lisp perplexed
all listeners into concerned
stutters.

[Cybele]

Love it    !!

Good to meet you here again, could do with some help!

Wedding Speech

"Thwilling
I shay it ish!"
Too bad his lisp perplexed
all listeners into concerned
stutters.

On a Knife's edge

‘sdat a
dagger I see
before me or am I
in the wrong play? So, Mack the knife
it ain’t?

Toodle loo

Grace  

[JustDaniel]

Love it    !!

Good to meet you here again, could do with some help!

Wedding Speech

"Thwilling
I shay it ish!"
Too bad his lisp perplexed
all listeners into concerned
stutters.

On a Knife's edge

‘sdat a
dagger I see
before me or am I
in the wrong play? So, Mack the knife
it ain’t?

Toodle loo

Grace  

Now how did you go from "stutters" to "'sdat a," Grace?    Hard to believe that UK's pronunciation is THAT different!  

Anyhow... Good interp, Jessica! ... and graphic pictures, both of you!  

Eau Naturel


It ain’t

surprisin’ much

when she bids toodle loo;

it’s optin’ for a bush or lea
that shocks.

© M Lee Dickens’ son 16 Nov 2003

[Cybele]

Hey there Dan,  

Not English pronunciation, trying for American! I'm sure I've heard 'sdat a in hundreds of Americans films (movies)    

Eau Naturel


It ain’t

surprisin’ much

when she bids toodle loo;

it’s optin’ for a bush or lea
that shocks.  


Eau woe is me!

That shocks
Me too ya know
For shame Dan, you should think
Of toilet jokes as we pen fair
Cinquains

[JustDaniel]

Hey there Dan,  

Eau woe is me!

That shocks
Me too ya know
For shame Dan, you should think
Of toilet jokes as we pen fair
Cinquains

Hey, Grace!  

dry ink well

‘s ink wanes
as he attempts
to pen his penchant chants
on singing ‘neath full moon in lieu
o’ eau’d

© M Lee Dickens’ son 16 Nov 2003

[Cybele]

Good Morning Dan,

dry ink well

‘s ink wanes
as he attempts
to pen his penchant chants
on singing ‘neath full moon in lieu
o’ eau’d

Well now, I know only two pronunciations for cinquains and these are sink-ains or sank-ains. Because I wasn’t sure when I first came across them, how to pronounce the word I checked both English and American Dictionaries. Can’t find sink-wane anywhere.      

Rules of Engagement

Oh ode
To sun and moon.
Sun may sink, moon may wane
Heaven’s decrees must be obeyed
Ours too!

Happy day to you Dan

Grace  

[JustDaniel]

Good Morning Daniel,

dry ink well

‘s ink wanes
as he attempts
to pen his penchant chants
on singing ‘neath full moon in lieu
o’ eau’d

Well now, I know only two pronunciations for cinquains and these are sink-ains or sank-ains. Because I wasn’t sure when I first came across them, how to pronounce the word I checked both English and American Dictionaries. Can’t find sink-wane anywhere.      

Rules of Engagement

Oh ode
To sun and moon.
Sun may sink, moon may wane
Heaven’s decrees must be obeyed
Ours too!

Happy day to you Daniel

Grace  

Greetings, Grace!

My readings on "Cinquain" have discovered several types of cinquains [ We've been playing with the 'traditional' type. ] but I have yet to find any place that tells me how to pronounce "cinquain."  I know 'cinq' is pronounced approximately 'sank' from the French to the English, but since this is sort of an American haiku, and they've added a 'u' before the 'ain,' it just sort of follows that they'd have pronounced it 'kwain' -- not that I care much, mind you! And I'd be glad to have you give a link to a dictionary that HAS the word, since I've yet to find one myself.  Thank ye!  

Now... while we're talking about following instructions ( which, honestly, I try to do... at least until I find ways to interestingly break them! ), I've shared with many of my writing friends that though I'd been called "Dan" for years, since about 7 years ago, after in important crisis in my life, and recognizing that "Dan" mean "Judge" [ from the Hebrew ], and since I wish not to be one, I'd best be known as "Daniel" which means "God is my Judge." And of course I know that a word to the wise is sufficient, right?

I ode you that explanation.

fond ‘o ‘eat


Our stew

will never be

o’er keeping rules or laws

but how we mix our vegetables

when sauced.


© Daniel J Ricketts 17 Nov 2003

[Cybele]

Hello Daniel,

You will find cinquain in the dictionary used on this very site Daniel.

Message received and understood. Daniel it shall always be in future my friend. (I hate abbreviated names anyway)

fond ‘o ‘eat


Our stew
will never be
o’er keeping rules or laws
but how we mix our vegetables
when sauced.



Drunk as a skunk

when sauced
steer clear of cars.
When three sheets to the wind
steer clear of rivers and the sea
and me!

A bientôt


Grace

[JustDaniel]

Hello Daniel,

You will find cinquain in the dictionary used on this very site Daniel.

Message received and understood. Daniel it shall always be in future my friend. (I hate abbreviated names anyway)

fond ‘o ‘eat

Our stew
will never be
o’er keeping rules or laws
but how we mix our vegetables
when sauced.

Drunk as a skunk

when sauced
steer clear of cars.
When three sheets to the wind
steer clear of rivers and the sea
and me!

A bientôt

Grace

Merci bien, Grace

Now all I have to do is figger out where that dictionary is on this site!

Cup o’ Good Cheer


‘and me

a flask o’ whine

an’ I ain’t joinin’ in;

we’ll talk another day ~ won’t be

disgust


© Daniel J Ricketts 17 Nov 2003

Off to work and a long drive north!
Lightly, Daniel  

P.S. Just so's ya know; I meant the 'sauced' to be ambiguous, of course, but it's the veggies that are in the sauce, not I!  I'm a t-totaller, actually -- even though I've worked for about 30 years with persons struggling with addictions.

[Guest_Dove_*]

Cup o’ Good Cheer

‘and me
a flask o’ whine
an’ I ain’t joinin’ in;
we’ll talk another day ~ won’t be
disgust

(not for an empty stomach)

Double Turmoil

Disgust
churns my stomach.
(Okay, that is plain gross.)
As I watch a cheerleader squeeze
a zit.

A zit
on her pale face!
In the front of the bus,
she peers at the cosmetic mirror
with fear.

[Guest__*]

Dear Dove

Lovely !

As it
happens, a zit
cannot stand the pressure
of properly administered
Vit Cee !

Alan McAlpine Douglas

[Guest_Dove_*]

what's vit cee?...some kind of overseas ointment?

[Guest__*]

Vitamin C !

I wanted it to be as near A Zit as poss !

Love
Alan

[Cybele]

Good Morning Sir Knight

As it
happens, a zit
cannot stand the pressure
of properly administered
Vit Cee !

Vit C
proved by science
to add years to your life
when taken in higher dosage
No Kid!

Ref:         http://www.vitamincfoundation.org/  

Daniel, you will find a link to the dictionary at the bottom of every forum page.
 

[Guest__*]

Dear Grace

Wasn't Daniel wot queried the Cee !

No DisgraCe

No kid,
no longer I :
recycled teenager,  :jester:
And NOT growing older disgrace-
ful C !

Alan McAlpine Douglas

[Cybele]

Hi Alan,

No, I realise that. I was referring to a previous post here, where Daniel was querying where to find the dictionary on MM with regard to the pronunciation of  'Cinquain'. See our posts above

Back soon

Love

Grace