Hi Steve.
I enjoyed your descriptive piece on FIRE. I've noted some punctuation changes below for you to ponder.
Cheers!
~Cleo
[+] {-}
In heat{, smoke} and light,
fire becomes an unnatural beast{,}
clawing its way from the womb{;}[.]
[It] burst{ing}[s] to life
with a crackle[,] {that} [then] rises to a roar{;} (suggest 'maturity' in place of roar)
changing everything in {a} [one] magificent instant{;}[…] (Typo: magnificent)
slithering, sliding its way over wood;
staining what was clean and bright{,}
with black and powerful fingers of flame.
Without the notes:
In heat and light,
fire becomes an unnatural beast
clawing its way from the womb.
It bursts to life with a crackle,
then rises to maturity
changing everything
in one magnificent instant…
slithering, sliding its way over wood;
staining what was clean and bright
with black and powerful fingers of flame.