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JustDaniel
post Nov 19 03, 04:14
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QUOTE (Alan @ Nov. 19 2003, 01:16)
Dear Grace

Wasn't Daniel wot queried the Cee !

No DisgraCe

dance.gif No kid, dance.gif
no longer I :
Jester.gif recycled teenager,  Jester.gif
And NOT growing older disgrace-
sings.gif ful C ! sings.gif

Alan McAlpine Douglas devil.gif


Greetings, Fair Maid 'n Sir Red/Green Knight!

scared shipless

full sea

o’ ships so Fleet

it caused the enema

to turn its ugly tail an’ run

o’erboard


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post Nov 21 03, 01:56
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Good Morning Daniel, sun.gif

Trust all your nasty little germs have departed? medusa.gif


scared shipless


full sea
o’ ships so Fleet
it caused the enema
to turn its ugly tail an’ run
o’erboard


o’erboard
in love with you
no life jacket. I’m caught
between the devil and the deep
blue sea



Jusqu'à la prochaine fois  wave.gif



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JustDaniel
post Nov 21 03, 04:20
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QUOTE (Cybele @ Nov. 21 2003, 00:56)
Good Morning Daniel, sun.gif

Trust all your nasty little germs have departed? medusa.gif

o’erboard
in love with you
no life jacket. I’m caught
between the devil and the deep
blue sea



Jusqu'à la prochaine fois  wave.gif



Grace
Morning, Grace!

cheer.gif Nearly overcome by those waves! wave.gif

Rock ‘n’ Roll Reaction

:blues:

Bluesy

writers find it

hard to compose themselves

when those trade winds churn new waves’ up –

heaving


ghostface.gif

© Daniel J Ricketts 21 Nov 2003

oops.gif jusque à celui qui monte Idea.gif


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post Nov 21 03, 20:00
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QUOTE (Just Daniel @ Nov. 21 2003, 02:20)
Rock ‘n’ Roll Reaction

Bluesy
writers find it
hard to compose themselves
when those trade winds churn new waves’ up –
heaving


ghostface.gif  

Laughing at Dirty Diapers

Heaving
a pant, I run
you to the warmth rising
from the tub. Midnight episode:
belly up.
 
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JustDaniel
post Nov 22 03, 08:01
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QUOTE (Dove @ Nov. 21 2003, 19:00)
Laughing at Dirty Diapers

Heaving
a pant, I run
you to the warmth rising
from the tub. Midnight episode:
belly up.

cloud9.gif Hey, Jessica! cheer.gif  

oops.gif Methinks them diapers musta sogged up yer last line, blush21.gif
makin' the third syllable indistinguishable?  


wantin’ ta clock grampa


bell ~ yup

heard it agin

clangin’ cacophony

when eye’d tried awf’l hard ta sleep

dis mourn



© Daniel J Ricketts 22 Nov 2003

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post Nov 25 03, 07:25
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Can anyone get in on this act?  Must one tie their cinquain to one previously posted?  May I post a single one that came to mind this morning?  My apologies if it's supposed to be linked with Daniel's.   sun.gif

Our Health
what a blessing!
We ignore it when sound,
take it for granted, but how dear,
good health.


Thar ya go!  I done it one more time!    :smart:
Here's to a happy and healthy Holiday Season to you all!

Athena/Dolly    Pharoah.gif
 
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Cybele
post Dec 2 03, 08:10
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Hi all.

Will it spoil the fun to post just an ordinary cinquain (without following on)? Or should I put it in a separate thread.I excpect someone will let me know, so I'll take a chance.



Love’s death

icy
fear grips my heart
words no longer gentle
fall from your once, sweet tender mouth
like stones


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post Dec 2 03, 11:33
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Dear Grace

This is all Daniel's fault. I posted a single haiku, called Extraction Haiku. Daniel decided that this was a new form of haiku, and started a string by using words from mine to create his.

Seems this habit has spread so far that it has become the norm.

So, as the originator of the original Extraction Haiku (about dentistry ! ), I now pronounce :

In this thread, there is no requirement to connect to the previous !

Now to your lovely effort :


icy
fear grips my heart
words, no longer gentle -- wonder if you want the comma in this line?
fall from your once* sweet, tender mouth -- no middle comma !
like stones

Love
Alan

PS The next one is very nice too !
 
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Cybele
post Dec 2 03, 11:45
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Well, thank you Sir Knight knight.gif

I have the urge to write another cinquain - so here goes:





Greek Village

Old men
on ancient chairs
sit in contemplation
of long-lost loves, gently twirling
their beads


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post Dec 2 03, 12:12
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Does that...
old fairy tale
still tell of maidens fair
that kiss a frog and then release
a Prince...


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post Dec 2 03, 12:42
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Dear Liz

Nice thought, line 4 1 syll short !

Another answer :

PRESS RELEASE BY FROGSPAWN PR CO

Yes Liz
it's a rumour
spread at the behest of
a small group of desperately ugly
Frenchmen

Love
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AMETHYST
post Dec 2 03, 13:29
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Hi Alan,

Oooops, I cannot believe I did that.. me, mistress of cinquains... ah, what a fever will do...  :huh:

Frenchmen,
I thought handsome
with twinkles of romance
that dance in a glance to entrance
the girls!


I have to go fix that other one... Hugs, Liz


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post Dec 2 03, 17:28
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Where are you?

my voice
calls out to you
but Winter’s screaming wind
scatters the words through boughs of pine
unheard


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post Dec 6 03, 02:27
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Good Morning Sir Knight knight.gif

I bestow you with the new title "Guardian of the commas" laugh.gif  
Thank you Alan. I have a million of them but they keep trying to escape when I need them or just fly off willy nilly into a poem without my express permission - but I know I can rely on you to come to the rescue LOL.gif

Correction made smart.gif

NOW!!!!!

Yes Liz
it's a rumour
spread at the behest of
a small group of desperately ugly
Frenchmen


Do I count TEN on the fourth line????? rofl.gif



Love

Grace xmas.gif  cheer.gif


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post Dec 6 03, 02:34
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Hi Liz,  sun.gif  dance.gif

Frenchmen,
I thought handsome
with twinkles of romance
that dance in a glance to entrance
the girls!  



Love it Liz, (trips off the tongue like a song)  dance.gif

Love


Grace sings.gif  cheer.gif


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post Dec 6 03, 02:43
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Hello Dolly,  sun.gif

( I do like saying that, it makes me want to burst into song - you wouldn't like to hear that Dolly ) huh.gif

Glad to see this breakaway back to normal cinquain. Whilst I love Daniel's crazy 'carry on' cinquain, it is sometimes good to write individual pieces. When he comes back from his sojourn in hospital he'll wonder what has happened. LOL.gif


Love

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post Dec 6 03, 02:47
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Unseen graces

sleepless..
summer’s perfumes
drift in through my window
and small stirrings seldom noticed
by day


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post Dec 6 03, 02:48
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Dear Grace,

Errrrrr, um, yes. So glad you spotted my deliberate error, 10/10 !

Now, for the purists amongst us (except for the comma-toes sticklers) :

Yes Liz
it's a rumour
spread at the behest of
hordes of desperately ugly
Frenchmen



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Cybele
post Dec 6 03, 03:00
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Great riposte Alan!!  knight.gif

I am feeling a little comma toes this morning. Woke up at three thirty and couldn't get back to sleep.....zzzzzzzzzzzzzzz huh  huh.gif Where am I?


Love

Grace cloud9.gif  


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post Dec 6 03, 03:21
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Dear Grace

SOMA WRONG AND SOMA WRITE
It's ana Italiano Cinquaina

Coma-
(comma) toes in
line three, not in a bed,
compose themselves for sleep, if not,
compose !

Love
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