 Mystical Night of Ebony Skies, by Briana |
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 Mar 16 04, 19:05
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Hello MM friends. My daughter, Briana, (12~yrs.~old) just wrote this poem for fun. (I swear, it is her poem!!!!!)
 I thought it was very sweet and wanted to share it with you. Mystical Night of Ebony Skies Mystical night of ebony skies tumbles and turns, falling, thunder and laughter both collide, mystical night of ebony skies. Roaring and weeping cries of sorrow, doubts of wonder, regrets for tomorrow, Mystical night of ebony skies tumbles and turns, falling, thunder and laughter both collide, mystical night of ebony skies. ©Briana Balboni 2004 ·······  ·······"Imagination is more important than knowledge and encircles the world"
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Mar 16 04, 20:31
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Whoa Briana! :pharoah2
Well, you certainly take after your mom in the artistic realms!  This is FAB! I like the repetition - it works very well in this piece, not to mention the metaphors. I think of the great Greek gods arguing amongst themselves high among the stars above. Awesome! ~Cleo 
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Mar 17 04, 17:27
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Hi Briana:
This is an absolutely great poem. You should be sooooo proud of yourself. I agree with Cleo, you are your mother's daughter... Keep up the wonderful work. Love, Shava |
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Mar 18 04, 17:07
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QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Mar. 16 2004, 19:31) Whoa Briana! :pharoah2 Well, you certainly take after your mom in the artistic realms! This is FAB! I like the repetition - it works very well in this piece, not to mention the metaphors. I think of the great Greek gods arguing amongst themselves high among the stars above. Awesome! ~Cleo Hello Lori Thanks for you comment! Thank you so much for saying you like it!  I love your poems too and mom thinks your a great poet...... :pharoah2 Take Care Briana 
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Mar 18 04, 17:09
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QUOTE (Shava @ Mar. 17 2004, 16:27) Hi Briana: This is an absolutely great poem. You should be sooooo proud of yourself. I agree with Cleo, you are your mother's daughter... Keep up the wonderful work. Love, Shava Hello Shava:) Thanks for liking my poem!    xoxoxo Briana 
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Oct 3 04, 20:44
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Seems like you have a talent on your hands here. This hands down beats a lot of the poetry I see from grownups...a challenging read with vivid imagery. :dance: :grinning: :upside:
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Oct 15 04, 15:55
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This is a really great poem. You have real talent, sounded like it could have been written by an adult. Keep writing!
Cathy |
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Jan 23 05, 17:12
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 1,250 Joined: 2-August 03 From: USA Member No.: 7 Writer of: Poetry |
QUOTE (Taita @ Oct. 03 2004, 21:44) Seems like you have a talent on your hands here. This hands down beats a lot of the poetry I see from grownups...a challenging read with vivid imagery.   This is Bri, Thank you so much for responding and liking my poem. It means very much to me. Take care  Bri ······· ·······"Imagination is more important than knowledge and encircles the world"
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Jan 23 05, 17:13
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QUOTE (larrysgirl5548 @ Oct. 15 2004, 16:55) This is a really great poem. You have real talent, sounded like it was written by an adult and even better than some lol:D Thank you very much. I am glad you liked it! Bri ······· ·······"Imagination is more important than knowledge and encircles the world"
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 Jan 23 05, 17:37
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 Creative Chieftain Posts: 1,802 Joined: 24-April 04 From: Connecticut Member No.: 58 Real Name: Ron Jones Writer of: Poetry |
Dear Bri,
The sages say one should make best use of his talents. I'd like to read your next offering! Cheers, jgd ······· ······· |
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Jan 29 05, 10:55
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 1,250 Joined: 2-August 03 From: USA Member No.: 7 Writer of: Poetry |
QUOTE (jgdittier @ Jan. 23 2005, 17:37) Dear Bri, The sages say one should make best use of his talents. I'd like to read your next offering! Cheers, jgd Hi jdg,  Thank you very much. I am happy you liked it. Bri 
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Jun 10 05, 20:09
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 Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 1,547 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Jeddah, Saudi Arabia Member No.: 13 Real Name: Daniah Writer of: Poetry |
Oh wow Briana,
When I saw the title I just had to read and see what gem you have conjured up for us... What an excellent poem sweetie. I'm gonna let Jina read it. Hugs hon Dani ······· ·······Happiness is a journey, not a destination.
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Jun 17 05, 20:01
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 1,250 Joined: 2-August 03 From: USA Member No.: 7 Writer of: Poetry |
QUOTE (Siren @ June 10 2005, 21:09) Oh wow Briana, When I saw the title I just had to read and see what gem you have conjured up for us... What an excellent poem sweetie. I'm gonna let Jina read it. Hugs hon Dani Dear Dani~ Thank you very much. Tell Jina I said hi too! Luv, Bri ······· ·······"Imagination is more important than knowledge and encircles the world"
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