Untitled, Pet Sonnet Options

[Merlin]

Pink skies soon grace new morning's gray attire;
dawn's breezes rise as steeds await their fare.
If Giant Brae won't freeze in chilly air,
it cannot place sharp needles on a briar.
The sun calls on its dayspring gait, go higher
atop those walls, through vale and village square;
equate all lands with honest drift and share;
give faces smiles, let pale night-light retire.

Taking strides, it teases birds to sing –
enjoy my warmth, my heat, and seize delight
in every flight or ride, on every trace.
Complete your circuits, see a rose upswing,
see mare and foal, a gift for any sight;
from here to there, it's me whom you'll embrace.

[Merlin]

Lori had a Facebook reminder from a year back and brought it forward. It's some sort of sonnet challenge and the above is my contrubition or contribution, whichever fits.

https://www.facebook.com/lorraine.kanter/po...203450698442768

Them's the link, should you wish to see the preceding 2, after which I wrote this un.

To complicate things, I took endwords from both those sonnets and used them internally in the respective lines. Using them as endwords didn't work due to style requirements. Hopefully that doesn't make it completely daft, and not too rough.

Merlin

[Larry]

Hi Merlin,

Strange sonnet you have there. I tried to follow the link but the page is no longer there.
Got another link?

Larry

[Merlin]

You're not wrong there, Larry. Using 2 words in the same lines made for a strange outcome.

I've tried the link and it works for me. The one above has a space at the end, so here's it without.

https://www.facebook.com/lorraine.kanter/po...203450698442768

It's Lori's thread from October 1 2014, should that help.

[Larry]

Hello again Merlin,

I do believe my problem to be that of membership. I am not of the Facebook ilk so it won't let me in to read any
posts on its pages. Oh well! That is not a great loss to me because I don't tweet, don't belong on any "social"
media group, am unfriended, un-liked and un-followed which makes me uncontrollably happy.

unable,

Larry

[Cleo_Serapis]

SQUEE! I luv it, Merlin!

Thanks for posting this one here as well - I shall go tomorrow and post in the words you used.

I must respond as well - haven't written any poetry in some time, but I do still visit here every day and read your posts in Karnak ans such.

Cheers,
~Cleo

[Merlin]

Hi,
the first 2 sonnets are copyrighted so I won't put them here. Their end-words are as follows:

gray, steed, brae, need
gait, vale, equate, pale
stride, heat, ride, complete
mare & there.

grace, breeze. freeze, place
calls, walls, drift,
face, tease, seize, trace,
see gift & me.

Those are the words I worked into my lines, with minor juggle. That put gray and grace into my L1, steed & breeze into L2, etc. Hopefully it will make things a bit easier to understand .

[Eisa]

Hi Merlin,

I have been absent for too long and now I find this lovely and unusual sonnet. I always love reading a good sonnet.

I tried the link too (and I am a member of FB) but it said the page had expired.

Unfortunately, I have no R&M poetry written to post at MM at this time, but I have a few in FV to post. I hope someone will find me there as it is very quiet in Serens

Great to read you again.

Eira