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March 2007 IBPC Nominations, for April Comp |
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Mar 14 07, 22:43
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Real Name: Elizabeth
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Referred By:Lori Kanter
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Hey Dani,
This is well deserving to be nominated for IBPC! I'll Third it! :)
Hugs, Liz
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Mar 14 07, 23:05
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Referred By:Lori Kanter
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I would like to nominate this poem by Jaxmyth, located in Seren's, titled Drought This is extremely well written, I felt the metaphor is strong, a link, like in a fence, connecting the reader to underlying meanings. A skilled use of poetic devices, both in sound and steady rhythm brings a pleasant experience, choice words, as the reader slows to meditate their meaning and connection within the poem bring to light those connections that create, for me, a fullness at poems end. It speaks of crafting, of creating using skills of a trade. It details the thoughts of perfection, as the narrator expresses the importance of each step-of setting boundaries, and creating relationships- I felt this poem gives a deep and profound glimpse into a craftsman/settler/society all linked by his fence. QUOTE I
We sink the corner posts first, as each defines a neighbour. It is here where the bottom six inches are the most important. It is here where the strength is muscled into the fence.
The heart of a fence lies in its foot. I tamp until the bar sings of possession, the bar bounces and writhes.
We snug the stays and tighten the wire, each barbed note is tensioned into voice the division sings a warning.
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The fence cannot hold back the drought. The sky aches blue and the sun eats green; the earth coughs dust as rich as blood.
My bones hunker down beside the rock. Eagles hang; wings wound into the wire, heads nailed down by the sun.
Ribs rack a heaving fleece. I watch my image fade from the eye of a lamb.
This post has been edited by Cleo_Serapis: Apr 1 07, 07:22
Reason for edit: Revision posted
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Mar 15 07, 05:13
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Mosaic Master
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Real Name: Eira Needham
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Referred By:Lori
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I second this -- a well written poem. Snow
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Mar 15 07, 08:21
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Real Name: Daniah
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Wonderfully well written.. Good luck !
Dani
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Mar 15 07, 09:32
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Real Name: Beverleigh Gail Annegarn
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Referred By:Jox
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Well Done a nomination already!
Excellent execution and word construction.
PP
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Mar 15 07, 19:07
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Mosaic Master
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Real Name: Eira Needham
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Referred By:Lori
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The Quatrain Refrain is no easy form to write and I am nominating this one writtten by Liz in Herme's. It is beautifully crafted while it tells a poignant tale. Excellent work! QUOTE Masked Artwork
With artist's palette, brush and hues in hand she decorates the drabness of the day- thin dabs of sanguine on an ashen land, soft strokes conceal what she will not betray.
The doctors canvassed charts, discussing test results; a darkish blot had showed when scanned, a teardrop shape-and still she paints her best with artist palette, brush and hues in hand.
She hides discolorations of her life by touching up the downs, a bit of spray, then casting shadows with a shaping knife. She decorates the drabness of the day
to filter out the fading tints of sin in youthful days. A woman in command, when strength and courage were immersed within- thin dabs of sanguine on an ashen land.
Her gallery is now a storage shed of artwork which will never be displayed- each dappled bloom now lives among the dead; soft strokes conceal what she will not betray.
This post has been edited by AMETHYST: Apr 1 07, 08:23
Reason for edit: Edit of Newest Revision
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Mar 15 07, 21:31
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Real Name: Elizabeth
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THank you Snow! You've made my day! Thank you ... I will be making some minor tweaks before polling!
Big Hugs, Liz
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Mar 16 07, 11:02
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I would like to nominate this poem for the depth in meaning, the masterful crafting and the excellence in poetic devices, such as sounds effects though out, fresh end rhymes and how the poem reads aloud like a musical lullaby. There is profundity within each stanza, how it relates to our lives and the generations that domino thereafter. Such lines as L2/L3 of S1, SHOW that innocence on both sides of the coin - us at 17, our children at 17 and their impressions of us. This, in my opinion, is by far a well written, well deserving poem. It is located in Plato's Pearls: Click here! QUOTE Seventeen
Seventeen... that’s the age filled with wonder and awe; you’d arrived at a place where you saw what you saw, and you knew what you knew, but you hadn’t yet seen that your seeing was dim and your knowing was green. So you blundered on eighteen and found a small flaw…
freedom now held you culpable under the law. All the stuff that you’d yearned for so long had its draw, but the straw in your mouth tasted strangely of spleen… Seventeen… that’s the age!
In the next couple decades, you stiffened your jaw to the winds of reality, lived through a thaw that had nearly submerged you in floods unforeseen... and you'd turned thirty-four, with your firstborn… sixteen, when that brilliant young kid had a dumb ma and pa… seventeen… that’s the age.
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Mar 16 07, 13:25
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Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr.
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Referred By:Lori
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Thank you so much, Liz... and I humbly accept the nomination. If there are any changes to this after critique I shall let you know before any finalization that may be necessary, though I'm reasonably satisfied with it as it now appears. This has not been nominated elsewhere for anything, and it's not been published, and you know my given name, which I always like to go with my pen name if that is okay. Thank you so much for the nomination for the internal voting. deLighting to share with y'all, Daniel
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Mar 16 07, 17:33
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Hey Liz, Thanks sweetie for thirding it. Hugs Dani
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Mar 16 07, 17:38
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Hey Daniel, Good luck my dear! Dani
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Mar 16 07, 17:42
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A wonderful nomination Liz, well deserving.
Hugs Dani
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Mar 19 07, 08:25
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Real Name: Elizabeth
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Hi Daniah,
Thank you so much! There is stil some tweaks coming on this but over all I like which direction it is heading! :)
Thank you for coming in and giving a thumbs up! Best Wishes in the polling - Your poem is wonderful...
Hugs, Liz
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Mar 19 07, 18:27
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Permission Granted, Thanks Daniel! Good luck in the Polls and competition! :)
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Mar 23 07, 11:39
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Per Daniel's email request today, I have removed 'Seventeen' from the POLL as he revoked his permission to have the poem included in our polling.
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Mar 29 07, 05:23
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Mosaic Master
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Congrats Liz on being selected for the April IBPC comp!
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Mar 29 07, 05:24
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Mosaic Master
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Congrats Jan on being selected for the April IBPC comp!
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Mar 29 07, 05:25
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Mosaic Master
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Thank you very much to those who've voted for this poem to represent MM in the April comp!
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Mar 29 07, 07:16
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Real Name: Elizabeth
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Congratulations Lori ... Good luck representing MM in the April Competitions.
Hugs Liz
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Mar 29 07, 07:18
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Yes Congratulations Jan ... This is an absolute guarentee to take something, if not first! :) Excellent poetry... Good luck ~
Hugs, Liz
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