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 Jul 1 07, 18:01
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 18,591 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori  |
sun-glazed ice;
eyes of gaunt feline meet catfish orbs © MLee Dickens'son 06 Mar 2007 ·······  ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Jul 2 07, 03:14
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
QUOTE (JustDaniel @ Jul 2 07, 00:01 )  sun-glazed ice; eyes of gaunt feline meet catfish orbs © MLee Dickens'son 06 Mar 2007 Love it, Daniel!  You have chosen your words carefully -- I like how it's a catfish to tie in with cat. I really can't see anything I'd change. You've painted a very clear picture here. Snow 
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Jul 2 07, 12:50
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,591 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Greetings, Snow!
It's hard to complain about that kind of critique.  I've been going back revising a few of my haiku to pack them a little tighter to loosen up the meaning. Maybe this one worked! YAY!!deLighting in feedback, negative or positive, so long as it's objective and from other POV's, Daniel 
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