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 Nov 20 09, 09:35
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep  |
I'd like to nominate Born of Sufferance by Wally. I enjoyed the inner meaning, smooth rhythms and rhymes and hope it'll receive a wider audience!
Good luck, ~Cleo  Born of Sufferance by Walter Schwim It's not about that desert bloom raised from adversity nor of its humble Eden stooped in anxious piety. Its all about a cryptic glyph concealed by dirt and stone; evokes the traveller’s weary smile who treads this path alone. It's crystal to an artist's brush, eludes your poet's eye yet softens at his brief caress this calloused soldier's sigh. Beneath each blossom's pretty smile lie thorn and toxic bane that shepherds knew could cure or kill so heed their wise refrain. "When strength is born of sufferance, it wields a holy grace: Do not mistake for weakness, friend, the beauty of a face."
Reason for edit: Latest Revision
·······  ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner           |
  
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Nov 20 09, 15:40
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 783 Joined: 24-July 07 From: South Africa Member No.: 457 Real Name: Walter Schwim Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Mistral |
I would like to nominate Robin's poem Osmosis for the IPBC December Competition.
It is incredibly subtle and shows outstanding use of metaphor dealing with an emotionally sensitive issue. Wally Osmosis by Robin DeWalt In this high rent, low class apartment I sit edge to edge in my chair, fertilized and fat. In your abstract kiss upon my questioning lips you became my scarecrow, tin man, and lion. In this world of Dr. Oz and Oprah there are no maps with yellow brick roads. This post has been edited by Cleo_Serapis: Nov 23 09, 18:22
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Nov 20 09, 20:00
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Got it, Wally - thanks for the heads up!
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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Nov 23 09, 09:50
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 783 Joined: 24-July 07 From: South Africa Member No.: 457 Real Name: Walter Schwim Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Mistral |
Hi Cleo,
Seems there is no further comment so I will go the version below. Thank a mil, Wally Born of Sufferance Rev 3 -23 Nov 09; It's not about that desert bloom raised from adversity nor of its humble Eden stooped in anxious piety. Its all about a cryptic glyph concealed by dirt and stone; evokes the traveller’s weary smile who treads this path alone. It's crystal to an artist's brush, eludes your poet's eye yet softens at his brief caress this calloused soldier's sigh. Beneath each blossom's pretty smile lie thorn and toxic bane that shepherds knew could cure or kill so heed their wise refrain. "When strength is born of sufferance, it wields a holy grace: Do not mistake for weakness, friend, the beauty of a face." ······· ······· |
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Nov 23 09, 18:20
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi Wally,
We have until the 1st of December, so if you make any further edits, let me know. Cheers ~Cleo
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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