Hi Richard,
Happy New Year!
I have been away from here too long!
I need time to chew this one over and will return, but on first read have a few minor suggestions.
Do not feel abandoned
you're not by me
when I think of anything
you help to place it
aongside swift mercy.
typo: alongside Your solace is fleet
and always, always there for me,
like the wind in memories
of the places I love,
in my inept worship of dim beauty
becoming brighter through use.
Not sure if you need always twiceYou unerringly point out
what is hidden beneath the stairs
that lead to a room I've never seen,
but know is there, filled
with the importance of losing yourself
and becoming the thousands of beings
outside these derelict woods.
You're there even when I don't need you,
which so far has not occurred,
but I trust that when it does
it will be because of my dotage
which is creeping up past your forbidding hand
raised to me in a wave or salute,
or both, that tells me what passes through me
will still be there in the morning,
with or without me,
but definitely with you.
I feel that this stanza is very wordy and could be tweaked quite a bit as some lines are unnecessary. Perhaps finish on 'will still be there in the morning'
You're there even when I don't need you,
but I trust that it will be because of my dotage
which is creeping up past your forbidding hand
raised to me in a wave or salute,
that tells me what passes through me
will still be there in the morning,Hope some of this might help in some way.
Eira