Hello Mau,
Hope all is well with you and you're handling the heat over there.
I liked this piece a lot but stumbled each time on that 5th line. There is a way to read it where the metre works out ok but it does not come naturally to me.
My only real nit is that the story seemed vague. I'm unsure who "HE" is in S3. Perhaps the ex or the new lover and what was it he did that was so bad? Also, who does she visit now?
Left me kinda puzzled and wondering if I missed something. (At my age that's more than likely)
The metre is fav of mine, actually not a heptameter but rather Paeonic tetrameter (one stressed in four) which is great for story telling since it contains double the syllables of iambic tet.
Well done and thanks for sharing, makes me want to hatch a piece using that catchy rhythm.
Hugz
Wal