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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 18,638 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori  |
Shadorma
Shadorma [ shad-oor-muh ] is a syllabic poetic form reminiscent of haiku and tanka; it is written either as a single sestet or a series of sestets, each with a syllable count of 3-5-3-3-7-5. It is reportedly of Spanish origin, created by court poets from the 14th – 15th centuries, though I have found no original sources of this. Any input or correction from others would be much appreciated, for the sake of accuracy. Here’s one example of my own… with a bit of word play: dream state
sleeplessness dreams in broad daylight half a wake unaware it's tolled eyes to take a knap to see what's inside © MLee Dickens'son ·······  ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Oct 26 06, 09:43
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,638 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
sub-polar low
eye can sense wake from manic whirl arising 'mid debris strewn over skewed horizon lifting fog a blur © MLee Dickens'son 26 Oct 2006 ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Oct 26 06, 15:01
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Inspiration
Heaven's veil will softly shimmer like fireflies; starlit nights then harvest a host of dreams that set me adrift, inspiring imagination to fly with fairy wings, claiming far-fetched fantasies to etch on my page. Cathy Bollhoefer copyright Oct 2006 |
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Oct 28 06, 08:10
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi Daniel.
The only other item I have found to note about Shadorma is that it should have un-rhymed lines. Here is my first attempt at this form: Cauldron brews, souls' bewitching charms casting spells ghoulishly unbeknownst to invited misplaced dinner guests.  ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner      |
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Oct 28 06, 08:12
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
QUOTE (Cathy @ Oct 26 06, 16:01 )  Inspiration Heaven's veil will softly shimmer like fireflies; starlit nights then harvest a host of dreams that set me adrift, inspiring imagination to fly with fairy wings, claiming far-fetched fantasies to etch on my page. Cathy Bollhoefer copyright Oct 2006 Cathy, this is a lovely  response to this form! Heaven's veil as the opener really sets the tone for what is to come. harvest those fairy wings! Well done! ~Cleo 
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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Oct 28 06, 08:47
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QUOTE Cauldron brews, souls' bewitching charms casting spells ghoulishly unbeknownst to invited misplaced dinner guests. You've brewed up the perfect Shadorma for the season! Thanks for the comments on mine!  Cathy |
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Oct 28 06, 09:04
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Thanks Cathy.
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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