In Fields of Green, My first Rondeau Options

[Cleo_Serapis]

In Fields of Green

In fields of green the clover grow
between the flakes of fallen snow,
that rest upon a glistened sight
the eyes of March shall so delight,
the birth of Springtime’s tinted glow.

Hold fast to hope; winter’s let go
of icy grip on roots below,
to rest in hibernation’s night
in fields of green.

It’s time to wake the hungry crow
for March arrives, and flowers grow,
among the flakes of melting white
in clover’s crops of sprawling might
where seeds of  love and life will sow
in fields of green.

© 2004 Lorraine M Kanter
All rights reserved as an unpublished work

[Orion]

Cleo,

I enjoyed reading your poem, and it only encourages me to jump into the 'metered pool'! One day...one day...one day I may try to fence in my wild, wandering poetic thoughts.~grin~

~Orion~

[Cleo_Serapis]

Cleo,

I enjoyed reading your poem, and it only encourages me to jump into the 'metered pool'! One day...one day...one day I may try to fence in my wild, wandering poetic thoughts.~grin~

~Orion~

Hi Orion!  :read:

Ahhh- thankies!  Do you remember when I couldn't find meter if my life depended on it? Well, I'm still looking, but every once in a while, the hide & seek favors me.

Hope you'll give one a try, but honestly, your writings are great the way they are!  :pharoah2

Thanks for stopping by!
~Cleo  :pharoah:

[Aphrodite]

Hello Lori~

You did a great job on your first Rhondeau! (especially the first stanza)
The vivid imagery and lovely flow of your poem has me "yearning" for the emerald landscape of spring, even more!

Awesome! :pharoah2        

Blessings~
Lindi

[Cleo_Serapis]

Hello Lori~

You did a great job on your first Rhondeau! (especially the first stanza)
The vivid imagery and lovely flow of your poem has me "yearning" for the emerald landscape of spring, even more!

Awesome! :pharoah2        

Blessings~
Lindi

Hey Aphrodite!  :lovie:

Thanks so much! Well - Spring has sprung...so let's get  :dance:
about it!  :sun:

Thanks for stopping by! This is an addicting form of poetry!  :wizard:

Cheers!
~Cleo  :pharoah:

[Guest_blondie_*]

Hi Cleo,

Excellent imagery!  The grass is the prettiest shade of green this time of year.  Unfortunately, I hate mowing grass.  

A great poem of rebirth and life.  The flow is calming and alive, and the rhyme is perfect.

Thanks for sharing.

~Amy~

[Ephiny]

I loved this even though I'm not entirely sure what a rhondeau is (excuse my ignorance !)

I really liked the line "hold fast to hope; winter's let go" and after that, how you gently yet deftly brought in so many beautiful images of spring and grass and new life to everything.  I really enjoyed this one

[Guest__*]

Dear Ephiny,

Rondeau - go to Karnak's Crossing, listed a few below this forum, for an extensive education on poetic forms.

I've never tried one, seems hard to me, so even more admiration to Cleo, as this is very good !

Love
Alan

[Cleo_Serapis]

Hi Cleo,

Excellent imagery!  The grass is the prettiest shade of green this time of year.  Unfortunately, I hate mowing grass.  

A great poem of rebirth and life.  The flow is calming and alive, and the rhyme is perfect.

Thanks for sharing.

~Amy~

Hello Amy!

I love walking barefoot through the grass in Summer months, except ya gotta watch out for bees! My first bee sting was from walking barefoot when I was around 12. OUCHIE!  :violin:

I appreciate your compliments! It takes alot of practice for me to get rhythms and rhyming to work together!  :dunce:


~Cleo  :pharoah:

[Cleo_Serapis]

I loved this even though I'm not entirely sure what a rhondeau is (excuse my ignorance !)

I really liked the line "hold fast to hope; winter's let go" and after that, how you gently yet deftly brought in so many beautiful images of spring and grass and new life to everything.  I really enjoyed this one

Hi Lucie!

I've copied the definition of "Rondeau" for you below.

The Rondeau consists of three stanzas, a quintet (5 lines), a quatrain (4 lines) and a sestet (6 lines), making the poem a total of 15 lines.

The first phrase of the first line usually sets the refrain ®, but sometimes the refrain can be the whole of the first line. The structure is:

line 1 - a ®(normally the first phrase is the refrain)
line 2 - a
line 3 - b
line 4 - b
line 5 - a

line 6 - a
line 7 - a
line 8 - b
line 9 - R

line 10 - a
line 11 - a
line 12 - b
line 13 - b
line 14 - a
line 15 - R

The meter is considered be open and the French style is not bound by a rhyming pattern and also is more of a light and buoyant even "flashy" form of poetry which uses short lines. The English style however, is much more dour and serious, even meditative and uses tetrameter or pentameter.

I like to try to capture images in poetry - you can see so much in Nature, the trick is to try and convey it in words.
Glad you enjoyed! Thank you!  :cloud9:

~Cleo

[Cleo_Serapis]

Dear Ephiny,

Rondeau - go to Karnak's Crossing, listed a few below this forum, for an extensive education on poetic forms.

I've never tried one, seems hard to me, so even more admiration to Cleo, as this is very good !

Love
Alan

Thanks Alan!  :angel:

You should try one! You LOVE challenges - this was a tough one!

I say, Go for it!  :cheer:

[Ephiny]

Thanks very much for the info, Cleo and Alan, I'm going to study it and hopefully make an attempt

[Cleo_Serapis]

Thanks very much for the info, Cleo and Alan, I'm going to study it and hopefully make an attempt

[marquee]GO FOR IT LUCIE! [/marquee]

Best of luck!  

~Cleo