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Oct 27 03, 06:59
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Thankies, LorII! Here's one on a much more serious, reflective note: potter
reshapes his earth
immersing his spirit
into every nuance of touch
sometimes leaving inexplicable marks
unmerciful wheel spins questions
seemingly pointlessly
who controls this
potter
© Daniel J Ricketts 26 Oct 2003 Held Lightly by gravity, Daniel
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Nov 6 03, 15:47
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I slept
without a stir
alone in my West Wing;
body’s Law and Order sacked me.
Such News frightened me awake but briefly,
whispering, You’ll doze off Tonight.
Good knight woke me this morn
offering a toast;
ice leapt.
© Daniel J Ricketts 06 Nov 2003
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Nov 6 03, 20:45
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You are very clever and original with these Daniel!
Love 'em all! :cheer: :sings: :wave:
Hugarooos! ~Cleo :lovie:
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Nov 6 03, 23:49
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QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Nov. 06 2003, 19:45) You are very clever and original with these Daniel! Love 'em all! Hugarooos! ~Cleo Thankies, Ms Cleo! I miss our occasional early morning exchanges... but alas I just am not around much for awile! Waaaaaaaa!
Blossom faded though fair yet withered of a hope only yesterday emblazoned on opulently hued petals, fiery sweet scents permeating a warm breeze, now stale, acrid, hanging from a tear-streaked blossom.
© Daniel J Ricketts 22 May 2003
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Nov 7 03, 06:16
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No worries - we're all so busy!
My PC FRIED yesterday at work at 1 PM. Our IS department hasn't been back since! LOL!
So, I am without a pc at work (been using Lindi's in the afternoon). I do HOPE they at least tell me what's up today! I've been SOOOOOO STRESSED at work (ask Lindi) on a project to go live on Monday (big deal at Bose, been the project manager on this one since April) - I finally see the light and POOF - black screen syndrome! LOL!
At least it's at WORK and not our home pcs.
My advise nevertheless: Back up your data OFTEN!
I spy a poem coming on - my MUSE is stirring!
Catcha later! Cleo :pharoah: :alien:
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Nov 7 03, 07:23
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QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Nov. 07 2003, 05:16) No worries - we're all so busy! My PC FRIED yesterday at work at 1 PM. Our IS department hasn't been back since! LOL! So, I am without a pc at work (been using Lindi's in the afternoon). I do HOPE they at least tell me what's up today! I've been SOOOOOO STRESSED at work (ask Lindi) on a project to go live on Monday (big deal at Bose, been the project manager on this one since April) - I finally see the light and POOF - black screen syndrome! LOL! At least it's at WORK and not our home pcs. My advise nevertheless: Back up your data OFTEN! I spy a poem coming on - my MUSE is stirring! Catcha later! Cleo I surely don't want to get your back up, LorII! So, get your back-up! A muse
will stir ewe up;
it’s faun’d of satyrs too.
Can’t see the forest for the trees?
Well, don’t give up! Acorn is all I knead
to fill or sophic’ly reflect
upon a subject here
attempting to
amuse.
© Daniel J Ricketts 07 Nov 2003 deLightingly, Daniel
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Nov 23 03, 14:22
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Death’s Blind Faith
“No Death?”
Eye’d move away
to sense reel life… apart
from God, who’d better save His Breath.
No guilt… I’d feel exhilaration’s thrill to fly
on eagle’s wing… then realized
too late… without His wind
I’m fallin’… Oh
no! Death.
© Daniel J Ricketts 23 Nov 2003
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Feb 13 04, 02:21
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Capricious March
Blowing wind carresses the trees making sea sounds nudging debris into ravines completely out of sight, so we're left beauties of slow arriving spring one day cool the next warm one still, next one blowing
© D R Harris - 12 February 2004 (Well, I'm still new to rictameters ... they'll get better ... I hope)
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Jul 13 04, 12:59
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I was turned on to this form a few days ago. This is my first. Mine will usually have meter and rhyme.
Gardener
Lush lawns like emeralds surround a sapphire gem whereon the windblown ripplets run and reach as if to capture beams of sun. The music of the morning has begun. As songbirds sing for him, he starts to mow lush lawns.
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Jul 13 04, 13:25
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Excellent piece, Sue... please forgive my response: Guardin’ ‘er
rush in to lounge upon his lucioius carpet green more plush than I have ever seen then furtively we’ll slip away, dive in to cool ourselves until that mean old gard’ner comes to bean us; watch that fool rush in
© Daniel J Ricketts 13 July 2004
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Jul 13 04, 13:35
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Amazing...How in the world do you do that so quickly...and well? I'm speechless with awe, Sue
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Jul 13 04, 13:56
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rictametric key
the key to everything is choosing that first line anticipating how you'll close; the rest will come to you, if patiently you plod along not fearing how you'll lock the door behind because you have the key
© Daniel J Ricketts 13 July 2004
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Jul 17 04, 16:33
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Loving hands caress her, coaxingly undress her, and stroke her cheek to still a tear. While nibbling on the soft lobes of her ear, he scoops her up and off to bed, his sweet words in her head for a night of loving.
He leaves before the dawn, packs up and travels on and never even says goodbye. She sees him go but barely bats an eye, for in the evening every day, he wanders back her way before, once more, he leaves.
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Jul 17 04, 18:01
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Well, young lady, whoever you are...
you have marvellously captured the essence of rictameter.
I bow to your prowess!
deLightingly, Daniel :sun:
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Nov 14 04, 21:40
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Twilight to Dawn
Twilight fades with the dawn, bright yellows and roses ascending o'er the horizon announcing the arrival of new day. Captive stars in dark night bring sweet serenity. Gaze upon Twilight
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Nov 15 04, 11:15
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QUOTE (larrysgirl5548 @ Nov. 14 2004, 21:40) Twilight to Dawn
Twilight fades with the dawn of bright yellow and rose ascending o'er horizon's mourn announcing arrival of a new day. This beauty is so different from night's serenity with sparkling stars that lay captive Twilight
Write Wright
To right un-centered piece do not forget that words like of and the do not belong as line-ends on a tight rictameter. Select two sounds you want to start as well as end then just proceed to write.
© MLee Dickens’son 15 Nov 2004
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Nov 15 04, 13:53
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I've changed it, does it qualify now? lol
Thanks Daniel for pointing out my oops! You did miss one though, I had too many lines in the last half! :jester: Cathy :lovie:
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Nov 15 04, 17:22
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QUOTE (larrysgirl5548 @ Nov. 15 2004, 13:53) I've changed it, does it qualify now? lol Thanks Daniel for pointing out my oops! You did miss one though, I had too many lines in the last half! Cathy Your revision seems pretty good to me... though I've always found it helpful to others reading such a thread as this, to quote the original so that learners can see the progress of our own learning. That sort of thing always helps me, at least. (I know we all learn in very different ways.) And you're quite right; I did not count the syllables or the lines, and you slipped that in on BOTH of us, it seems... but you get the last laugh about your last half! Those words (not your laughing at me, because I certainly don't sense that!) have mused another rictameter! Here goes: a good guffaw
last laugh, it's said, laughs best by those who seem to know, but if it's at someone’s expense who's not agreed up front to pay the tab, I've found it much more apropos to (with some subtlety) let them have it... last laugh
© MLee Dickens'son 15 Nov 2004 sLightly deviously, Daniel
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Nov 15 04, 20:03
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Give thanks for our blessings received in bountiful doses from near and far by friends who touch all with a cornucopia of generosity and love laced with just the right blend of spice so nice Give thanks
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Nov 15 04, 20:13
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Snow falls serenading whipped cream dollops dancing in freckled white powdered sugar sprinkled with a dash of nutmeg spices glazing picturesque scenery on marshmallow bi-ways tinted cocoa snow falls
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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