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Real Name: Larry D. Jennings
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Hey Denis,
I've been looking around the "net" for triple Senryu and found that most of them are written where the second and third Senryu follow the first's subject matter without puns or allusions. I have never written one of these although I have penned nearly 800 single Senryu.
Can't critique what I have no experience writing! They are funny which is what a Senryu is supposed to be but I think you may be "forcing" the similarities a bit.
Joke: What does a dog do when coming into a new yard? A cat-scan!
Larry
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G'day Denis.
You seem to have the gist of things.
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I like your comical approach.
I'm sure Basho san would award 3 stars.
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Arnfinn
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