 SPRING BREAK, x10 from elsewhere |
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 Aug 5 10, 00:09
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends  |
SPRING BREAK
Lingering visions of bright singing blooms rippling vividly, seen through pension room’s open windows, are now quite spurious : only Paris seen plasters my leg. I’m furious ! Alan McAlpine Douglas Challenge words : bright lingering rippling vision window spurious vividly sing bloom Paris ·······  ······· |
  
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Aug 5 10, 06:06
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Ornate Oracle  Posts: 4,592 Joined: 31-October 03 From: New Jersey Member No.: 39 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Larry Carr |
Alan,
The title threw me, I was expecting yet another homage to the season of Spring. I was pleasantly surprised. Very succinct, but this doesn't need a lot of additional flourish. It's to the point. I keep reading your last line over and over and that one just doesn't seem to hold up as well as the others, although it is the one that brings it all to a shattering conclusion. I have to ponder it some more. I am wondering if the word "Paris" was the one key word that ignited your creative fire for the broken leg theme? JLY ······· ·······Give thanks for your new friends of today, but never forget the warm hugs of your yesterdays.
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Aug 5 10, 08:29
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
Dear John,
Ah, you know me so well ! Yes, I was determined to use that rather limiting word in as free a way as I could manage. In the end of course, I managed a double meaning. Love Alan ······· ······· |
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