Hi Jim,
Good to see you here again! I'm to a meeting but wanted to paste in my comments before I go. As always, T or T as you wish.My Soul knows God at instinct’s basic level,
*suggest changing to a colon or semi-colonit never entertains a shred of doubt,
and celebrates at intuition’s revels
whenever Godhead’s spoor is pointed out.
*Interesting word: spoor as in trail?My Spirit elevates when God is near me;
*suggest changing God to He and deleting the semi colonat prayer, or just conversing with a friend
who really listens - one I know who hears me
*perhaps use ‘see’ instead of ‘me’ again, really listens and hears me is a bit redundant – is that your intent in this line?and stands by me whatever life may send.
*Stands by me is a bit cliché, is there another way to phrase? Lovely imagery and sentiments in this stanza!My Heart expands to compass all my friendships
in recognition of our kindred state
and still finds room to offer berths to new ‘ships’
that lets them stop, not pass as ‘stranger’ freight.
* a little bump here in flow. Not too keen IMO on ‘stranger freight’ – is there another way to say this?But Soul is not synonymous with Spirit
nor Spirit quite coterminous with Heart
though each provides a measure to the unit
which makes of Man a precious work of Art.
FABULOUS!!!
Enjoyed the read!
~Cleo