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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep  |
 Crypt-Keeper's Irony He wanders tombs through dark of night in search of treasures to alight a path to riches, sweet perfumes. Through dark of night, he wanders tombs. This thirst he seldom seems to quench consuming dust’s archaic stench whilst raiding chambers, sneers death’s curse... he seldom seems to quench this thirst. Inscriptions warn of punishment in frail hereafter: life’s lament defiled - lest one Pharaoh’s scorn of punishment, inscriptions warn. Adorned facade discreetly hid Necropolis’ broken lid that once beheld doubt’s living god -- discreetly hid, adorned facade. In Thebes amid disunity, Stonemasons’ opportunity is shared in Nile’s mild reeds amid disunity -- in Thebes. Crypt-keepers feign incompetence whitewashed in deben bribe's defense while Ma’at is droned through priestly reign; incompetence -- crypt-keepers feign. This irony remains today, the ones in power do betray a nourishing of Ka campaigns. Today, this irony remains. Copyright © Lorraine M Kanter Notes: Necropolis: An extensive and elaborate burial place serving an ancient city Deben: A measurement of cost (a copper weight of .5 ounces) used as the unit of value for exchange, calculating value directly from the weight of gold for items of higher value, and from the weight of copper for less valuable items in an economy without coinage. A simple laborers pay was equal to 100 deben for 10-15 months work. Ma’at: The concept of order, truth and justice. After death, a person's soul is weighed against the feather of Ma'at to determine their fate in the afterworld. ka (in Ancient Egyptian Religion): A spiritual ‘double’ of the deceased, living within the body during life, and surviving the body after death. It was believed to be one of two spirits inhabiting the body, the main component of the soul. The ka is closely tied with the ba, the personality or psychic force of the deceased. Words used from 23 Sep Times Ten challenge: wandered (wanders), sweet, dust(s), sneer(s), quench, frail, discreetly, doubt(s) mild, murmur(s) Original - 23 Sep 2006: He wanders tombs indark of night in search of treasures to alight a path to riches, sweet perfumes; in dark of night, he wanders tombs. This thirst, he seldom seems to quench consuming dust’s archaic stench. He plunders chambers, sneers death’s curse; he seldom seems to quench this thirst. Inscriptions warn of punishment, in frail hereafter: life’s lament defiled - lest one Pharaoh’s scorn of punishment, inscriptions warn. Adorned facade discreetly hid Necropolis’ broken lid that once beheld doubt’s living god, discreetly hid, adorned facade. In Thebes amid disunity, Stonemasons’ opportunity is shared in Nile’s mild reeds, amid disunity in Thebes. Crypt-keepers feign incompetence, whitewashed in deben bribe's defense while priestly murmurs of Ma’at reign; incompetence - crypt-keepers feign. This irony remains today, the ones in power do betray a nourishing of Ka campaigns; today, this irony remains. This post has been edited by Cleo_Serapis: Apr 13 08, 14:11
Reason for edit: Revised
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Sep 23 06, 18:51
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Hi Lori,
I'm kind of in a hurry but I wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed this. The meter is so pleasant, bouncing right along except for here... (Aren't the lines supposed to have 8 syllables?) Inscriptions warn of punishment, in frail hereafter: life’s lament defiled - lest one Pharaoh’s scorn You are one syllable short in this line. of punishment, inscriptions warn. In Thebes amid disunity, Stonemasons’ opportunity is shared in Nile’s mild reeds, 2 syllables short here... amid disunity in Thebes. I will be back soon to leave further comment! Cathy 
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Sep 23 06, 19:11
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
QUOTE (Cathy @ Sep 23 06, 19:51 ) [snapback]83934[/snapback] Hi Lori, Hi Cathy.  I'm kind of in a hurry but I wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed this. The meter is so pleasant, bouncing right along except for here... (Aren't the lines supposed to have 8 syllables?) While there is no set syllable count with SQ, I tend to write them in tetrameter habitually.  Inscriptions warn of punishment, in frail hereafter: life’s lament defiled - lest one Pharaoh’s scorn You are one syllable short in this line. of punishment, inscriptions warn. I was wondering if others would pronounce defiled as 2 syllables (DEfild) where I pronounce it as 3, DE-FY-ILD. I could change it to: desecrated - lest Pharaoh's scorn ? In Thebes amid disunity, Stonemasons’ opportunity is shared in Nile’s mild reeds, 2 syllables short here... amid disunity in Thebes. Here above, I count Nile and Mild as 2 sylls each: NAY-EL and MAY-ELD. I will be back soon to leave further comment! Cathy I look forward to your return Cathy.  ~Cleo 
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Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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Sep 24 06, 08:37
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Hi Lori,
This guy must have guts! LOL Just a few thoughts for you to consider... of course, you're free to bury them if you will!  Cathy He wanders tombs in search of treasures to alight a path to riches, sweet perfumes; This thirst, he seldom seems to quench consuming dust’s archaic stench. I like the use of 'archaic'. He plunders chambers, sneers death’s curse; he seldom seems to quench this thirst. It seems he has no fear! Inscriptions warn of punishment, in frail hereafter: life’s lament defiled - lest one Pharaoh’s scorn I see what you're saying about the syllable count. Different pronunciations can be a pain. Some will say it with two and some with three! Yikes! LOL of punishment, inscriptions warn. Adorned facade discreetly hid Necropolis’ broken lid that once beheld doubt’s living god, discreetly hid, adorned facade. Is the comma needed here? In Thebes amid disunity, Stonemasons’ opportunity is shared in Nile’s mild reeds, When read your way it fits the flow! LOL amid disunity in Thebes. Crypt-keepers feign incompetence, whitewashed in deben bribe's defense while priestly murmurs of Ma’at reign; If this is done in iambic (which it seems to be) than this line feels off. Shouldn't 'Ma'at' be stressed instead of 'of'? incompetence - crypt-keepers feign. This irony remains today, the ones in power do betray a nourishing of Ka campaigns; today, this irony remains. |
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi Cathy.
Thanks for coming back so quickly! QUOTE (Cathy @ Sep 24 06, 09:37 ) [snapback]83969[/snapback] Hi Lori, This guy must have guts! LOL Ummm - yep, and some 'extras' here and there even. Just a few thoughts for you to consider... of course, you're free to bury them if you will! Cathy He wanders tombs in search of treasures to alight a path to riches, sweet perfumes; Oh - thank you, that works a tad better than my words! This thirst, he seldom seems to quench consuming dust’s archaic stench. I like the use of 'archaic'. Thanks Cathy.  He plunders chambers, sneers death’s curse; he seldom seems to quench this thirst. It seems he has no fear! Or he's greedy and stupid! LOL Inscriptions warn of punishment, in frail hereafter: life’s lament defiled - lest one Pharaoh’s scorn I see what you're saying about the syllable count. Different pronunciations can be a pain. Some will say it with two and some with three! Yikes! LOL Yeah, that's always a hard one, but to my ear, it flows OK. of punishment, inscriptions warn. Adorned facade discreetly hid Necropolis’ broken lid that once beheld doubt’s living god, discreetly hid, adorned facade. Is the comma needed here? YES, I think so, I am separating hid from adorned. In Thebes amid disunity, Stonemasons’ opportunity is shared in Nile’s mild reeds, When read your way it fits the flow! LOL Flowing down the Nile, with no deNile... Tee hee amid disunity in Thebes. Crypt-keepers feign incompetence, whitewashed in deben bribe's defense while priestly murmurs of Ma’at reign; If this is done in iambic (which it seems to be) than this line feels off. Shouldn't 'Ma'at' be stressed instead of 'of'? incompetence - crypt-keepers feign. I hadn't tried to make this poem fit iambic patterns, my writing just tends to go that direction methinks. I have always pronouced Ma'at like a door 'mat'. In that sense 'murmurs is off too but I cannot choose an alternate at the moment. This irony remains today, the ones in power do betray a nourishing of Ka campaigns; today, this irony remains. Thanks Cathy for your insightful critique! ~Cleo 
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Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Sep 28 06, 23:53 ) [snapback]84197[/snapback] Hi Cathy. Thanks for coming back so quickly! No problem! LOL Although it doesn't always happen that way! QUOTE (Cathy @ Sep 24 06, 09:37 ) [snapback]83969[/snapback] Hi Lori, This guy must have guts! LOL Ummm - yep, and some 'extras' here and there even. Yeppers! Just a few! Just a few thoughts for you to consider... of course, you're free to bury them if you will! Cathy He wanders tombs in search of treasures to alight a path to riches, sweet perfumes; Oh - thank you, that works a tad better than my words! Glad to help! This thirst, he seldom seems to quench consuming dust’s archaic stench. I like the use of 'archaic'. Thanks Cathy. He plunders chambers, sneers death’s curse; he seldom seems to quench this thirst. It seems he has no fear! Or he's greedy and stupid! LOL That could be!! LOL Inscriptions warn of punishment, in frail hereafter: life’s lament defiled - lest one Pharaoh’s scorn I see what you're saying about the syllable count. Different pronunciations can be a pain. Some will say it with two and some with three! Yikes! LOL Yeah, that's always a hard one, but to my ear, it flows OK.And that's what counts! of punishment, inscriptions warn. Adorned facade discreetly hid Necropolis’ broken lid that once beheld doubt’s living god, discreetly hid, adorned facade. Is the comma needed here? YES, I think so, I am separating hid from adorned.I see...  In Thebes amid disunity, Stonemasons’ opportunity is shared in Nile’s mild reeds, When read your way it fits the flow! LOL Flowing down the Nile, with no deNile... Tee heeLOL amid disunity in Thebes. Crypt-keepers feign incompetence, whitewashed in deben bribe's defense while priestly murmurs of Ma’at reign; If this is done in iambic (which it seems to be) than this line feels off. Shouldn't 'Ma'at' be stressed instead of 'of'? incompetence - crypt-keepers feign. I hadn't tried to make this poem fit iambic patterns, my writing just tends to go that direction methinks. I have always pronouced Ma'at like a door 'mat'. In that sense 'murmurs is off too but I cannot choose an alternate at the moment.It just seemed to read that way till I came to that line so then I wondered. LOL I haven't thought of an alternative either. I'll be back if I do. This irony remains today, the ones in power do betray a nourishing of Ka campaigns; today, this irony remains. Thanks Cathy for your insightful critique! ~Cleo Glad I could help Lori! Cathy |
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
QUOTE (Cathy @ Sep 29 06, 08:35 ) [snapback]84220[/snapback] Crypt-keepers feign incompetence, whitewashed in deben bribe's defense while priestly murmurs of Ma’at reign; If this is done in iambic (which it seems to be) than this line feels off. Shouldn't 'Ma'at' be stressed instead of 'of'? incompetence - crypt-keepers feign. I hadn't tried to make this poem fit iambic patterns, my writing just tends to go that direction methinks. I have always pronouced Ma'at like a door 'mat'. In that sense 'murmurs is off too but I cannot choose an alternate at the moment.It just seemed to read that way till I came to that line so then I wondered. LOL I haven't thought of an alternative either. I'll be back if I do. Glad I could help Lori! Cathy Hi again Cathy.  Yes, I can't think of one either at this time.  They are murmuring the Ma'at concept.Thanks for stopping by! ~Cleo
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Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Revision now posted.
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Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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Sep 28 07, 07:36
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
 Seeking feedback on latest revision. TY! ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Before I forget, thanks Sylvia (Psyche) for your nom on this one for Member Choice. I'm away at present but will post the poll there when time permits...
Cheers ~Cleo
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Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Any more comments/reviews? I'm getting ready to call this one a 'WRAP' lol
 for inclusion in the SQ chapbook and weclome any further comments you may have.Thanks! ~
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Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 3,822 Joined: 3-August 03 From: Florida Member No.: 10 Real Name: Elizabeth Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori Kanter |
Hey Lori,
I remember this, I believe I remember it before this posting and it was one of those poems that led me to fall completely in love with the form. The form truly highlights the subject and the images here. I am impressed. I've reread this a couple of times and found nothing I would change at this point, but had to comment on the strong end rhymes. How masterfully each exchange line reads unintrusively and smooth, so smooth infact that they are barely noticable until I contemplate the Form. This is a winner. This is still active in our forum, would it be ok to nominate it for IBPC~ Hugs, Liz ... ······· ·······Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here!
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hey there Liz,
Why thank you! I'm fond of this one for form and message and I'd be honored to accept your nomination! WOW! I hope you'll try a swap or two again and perhaps I will too! It's been a while and I look forward to reading your work again soon! Cheers, ~Cleo
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Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 3,822 Joined: 3-August 03 From: Florida Member No.: 10 Real Name: Elizabeth Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori Kanter |
This poem has been nominated for IBPC ... :)
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
 so much, Liz!
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Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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 Creative Chieftain Posts: 1,802 Joined: 24-April 04 From: Connecticut Member No.: 58 Real Name: Ron Jones Writer of: Poetry |
Dear All,
It was a great SQ when first posted and even better now. Probably the best exhibit its developer has written and worthy of the competition. It should be too, the pride of the chapbook. By the way, when will the chapbook appear? Cheers, Ron jgd ······· ······· |
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Thank you very much, Ron.
 I completely forgot about it this past month. I had mentioned it to Lindi last month too, that I need to get back and finish up the design work on it. There was one person that I didn't get a bio from nor have heard from (Michelle) so I may have to exclude her poem. I'll plan to get it on my radar next weekend, Ron. Thanks for the nudge!  ~Cleo 
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Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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