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JustDaniel
post May 13 05, 10:54
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Septolet

The Septolet  consists of seven lines containing fourteen words written in two parts with a break in between them, each part dealing with the same thought… to create one picture (to a degree, somewhat like the concept of haiku/senryu — which contain two snapshots of aspects of the same reality).

I stop


I stop
my ears
to hear

your fingers
singing
fragrant pictures,
seeing transparent love

© Daniel J Ricketts 30 Nov 2004

just duet

tenor
gives orchestra
human voice

baritone's antiphon
echoes appreciation
for soloist…
now in harmony

© Daniel J Ricketts 24 Nov 2004

Thank God

thanks-giving
for Blockbusters,
football, turkeys,
tryptophan… or

gratitude for life,
shelter, food,
safe family?

© Daniel J Ricketts 24 Nov 2004


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post May 14 05, 00:56
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Hi Daniel,

I love the simplicity of haiku, and this is wonderfully similar in essence. Thanks for introducing it and the examples. Each has an entirely differnt effect on the senses and ideas.

Fran
 
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JustDaniel
post May 16 05, 08:19
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Thank you, Fran... I've just rediscovered this form myself and have not yet really gotten a feel for it, but I want to.  I hope you'll join me in the quest? Yesterday, amid working on a series of acrostics during this month, I wrote this one in the septolet format:

LADDERS

Look up
and simply
dare to climb

don't fear
even one step...
remembering
safety

© Daniel J Ricketts 15 May 2005


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post May 16 05, 12:05
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Hi Daniel

How will this do?


Poetry

Look down
and simply
dare to write

not worrying
if no one
follows



A glimmer of an idea?

Fran
 
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post Jun 24 05, 08:43
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Hey, Fran!

Looks like I got side-tracked again, huh?  Sheesh! ... and after asking you to join me in the quest!

It appears that you're one word and one line short on this otherwise good start on your own journey into the Land of Septolet...

solace in solitude

wending trails
portend drudgery
on lonely trek

adventure
anticipates  
withdrawing peace
from secret account


© Daniel J Ricketts 24 June 2005


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post Feb 1 06, 17:33
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I’m debating
whether
I’m dim-witted
or simply dull.

You say
I’ll need
an aye-opener ?


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post Feb 17 06, 13:37
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Just Daniel,

This is toooooooooooo cute.......ArtesiaMeeks wave.gif  :wave:  :wave:
 
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post Feb 17 06, 14:27
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Ooh, I'd forgotten this - thanks, Artesia

I think I was a word and line short cos I was including the title in mine  :dunce:

Fran
 
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post Mar 18 13, 13:29
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I've not written one of these for a while... and maybe others might want to give this one a try too?

Here's one I don't think I ever posted (and it's an acrostic... which I normally indicated by making the title ALL CAPS):

ROOFING

Roll
out mesh
over cracks
flashing with tar

if mucked right
nothing
gets through


© MLee Dickens'son




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Larry
post Mar 18 13, 15:35
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Daniel, does this pass muster? It's a double acrostic and the form looks interesting but I know I'll need a lot of practice.


YEARS OF NOTHING

years can
elapse to
abort
reach;

suppose I
offer my own,
furthering yours along.


Thanks Daniel!


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post Mar 18 13, 15:41
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Hey, Larry...

you have an amazing talent for your double-acrostic poems. That takes a kind of mind-juggling I've yet to figure out. Maybe you could pass on to me some technique or trick you utilize to keep your mind focused on the end-product.

You've hit the mark for septoleting, methinks... so the ONLY suggestion I'd make is changing your title to

YEARS OF NOTHING

deLighting in your ingenuity, Daniel sun.gif


Hmmm... and coming back to this, here's my first attempt to follow your lead of a double acrostic septolet:


SUCCESS NOT EASY


Striving in
unison to
complete that
common cause...

encapsulating criteria
so participants
see synergy


© MLee Dickens'son 2013


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post Mar 18 13, 16:03
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Daniel,

You make it look easy though!

My key: All I do is figure out what I want to and am able to say within the parameters and fill in the blank spaces left by finding just the right word for fit and meaning.

I'll get back to you with my next one.

Larry


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post Nov 24 13, 20:43
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Here is another old piece posted here earlier, but appropriate for this season:

Thank God

thanks-giving
for Blockbusters,
football, turkeys,
tryptophan… or

gratitude for life,
shelter, food,
safe family?

© Daniel J Ricketts 24 Nov 2004


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Larry
post Dec 3 13, 00:31
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SAY NO TO SOUR SOY

save families
and those who
yearn for tofu.

Nice dinner
obviates
tasteless goo.
Oy!


I had to reach for this one!


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post Dec 8 13, 20:27
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toe fool? yo no soy *

taudry
old toe foo
ekes on

filth to
outside leaves
one's foot too
lumpy



*Sp. "I am not"


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post Dec 10 13, 01:19
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PICK AND EAT SOME

Plum pie
is not a
charming tidbit.

Kings
assassinate those who
nibble them.
Dine?


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post Apr 21 15, 13:12
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Here we are once more with nearly a year and a half without a post so I thought I'd try "Years of Nothing" once more.

YEARS OF NOTHING

Young men
escape into
another moment,

refusing each
second’s ennui.
Old men
find something.


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When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
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post Apr 22 15, 12:15
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Payment Down; Income Up

income tax
got confusing
when I drew
from an IRA

paid
down on
property


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post Apr 27 15, 23:53
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IN COMES PAYMENT

I stop
noticing a
cash outlay
obtained from

my vulnerable
earnings upon
satisfactory retirement



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post Apr 28 15, 07:43
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TIREMENT

tire changing
is more often
required for
energetic drivers

mechanics
emote... but
never
tire


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