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 Dec 6 08, 09:47
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 1,250 Joined: 2-August 03 From: USA Member No.: 7 Writer of: Poetry  |
She waits patiently, listening for
hurried hooves on rooftops with bells softly jingling, but hears the pounding of her neglected heart in the frostiness of December’s air. Her hands purple and chapped, placed over a small fire she carefully keeps going as she furiously rubs to generate feeling. Through faint colors of red, green and speckles of gold a surge of contentment warms her insides as she harks back to Christmas lights curved, on snow-powdered bushes in front of her childhood home, a slight smile widens her burdened face. She closes her eyes and breathes-in deeply the scents of peppermint, spice, pine and cinnamon, reminiscent of family and moments savored and consumed heart-fully. Her fantasy is soon replaced by sounds of gunshots, a dwindling fire shared in a rusted barrel, and city lights fading into the infected blackness of night, but like the magic of the season, she holds on to a slice of life and a sliver of hope. ·······  ·······"Imagination is more important than knowledge and encircles the world"
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Dec 6 08, 10:15
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Thank you for your Holiday entry Lindi!
 Best of luck!  May the 'classic' holiday spirit be shared in your heart throughout the season!  ~ Mosaic Musings Staff         ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner       |
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Dec 10 08, 22:02
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi Lindi,
This is such a strong poem, it's filled with lots of imagery and feeling - I felt sad for the woman at the end when you reiterate your title in the punch. A hopeful ending that perhaps she'll carry with her. Enjoyed, ~Cleo 
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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Dec 13 08, 10:22
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 1,250 Joined: 2-August 03 From: USA Member No.: 7 Writer of: Poetry |
QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Dec 11 08, 04:02 )  Hi Lindi, This is such a strong poem, it's filled with lots of imagery and feeling - I felt sad for the woman at the end when you reiterate your title in the punch. A hopeful ending that perhaps she'll carry with her. Enjoyed, ~Cleo Hi Lori, Thank you again for reminding me to participate in your holiday classic! I appreciate your kind words too. I always think of the blessings I have during the Christmas season, but also, how many unfortunate spirits exist in desperate circumstances. May you and Peter taste the many flavors of the holiday season! ······· ·······"Imagination is more important than knowledge and encircles the world"
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Dec 13 08, 10:23
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 1,250 Joined: 2-August 03 From: USA Member No.: 7 Writer of: Poetry |
QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Dec 11 08, 04:02 ) Hi Lindi, This is such a strong poem, it's filled with lots of imagery and feeling - I felt sad for the woman at the end when you reiterate your title in the punch. A hopeful ending that perhaps she'll carry with her. Enjoyed, ~Cleo Hi Lori, Thank you again for reminding me to participate in your holiday classic! I appreciate your kind words too. I always think of the blessings I have during the Christmas season, but also, how many unfortunate spirits exist in desperate circumstances. May you and Peter taste the many flavors of the holiday season! ······· ·······"Imagination is more important than knowledge and encircles the world"
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Jan 4 09, 17:59
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Congratulations! This submission has been nominated as a finalist in the fifth annual Mosaic Musings Holiday Classic!  Best of luck! ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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