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Jan 3 05, 07:54
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49er Nuggets are poems of 49 syllables arranged in 13 lines of 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 6 5 4 3 2 and 1 syllables, stating a 'nugget' of wisdom, perspective, insight, information, etc. preferably with a twist. A proper Nugget is to be Titled with a word-twist of some variety as well. I 'invented' the form in Dec, 2004.
Here are a three examples:
ore naught
why would I e’er attempt to make a mark? is there a purpose? should I merely aim to spread a little serendip? it teases me to forge limp, bleating poems seeming pointless ‘till they wake renewed Light
© Daniel J Ricketts 20 Dec 2004
in form I’ll query
Why would I want to kill ambition’s will by ripping form up; would this freedom limit me or others banging heads to get our feelings down in printed booklets, each with pages bound in one accord, no?
© Daniel J Ricketts 21 Dec 2004
‘s no fun
snow falling’s delightful if you see clear across your driveway or don’t work this morning or have waked at a ski lodge but if you’ve got two feet and wife says ‘shove it’ it just feels cold as it blows on red nose
© MLee Dickens’son 28 Dec 2004
Have fun!
deLightingly, Daniel
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Jan 3 05, 08:15
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Hi Daniel,
Happy New Year to you.
These nugget-shaped nuggets are pure gold - under your pen, at least.
A great contribution to poetry forms and some interesting pro-forma (sorry!) arguments for forms, within form. The snow was enjoyably clever, too.
I shalln't try one of these - but under your great direction they are very impressive.
Best wishes, James.
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Jan 3 05, 17:58
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Happy New Year Daniel and to your new form!
This looks very intriguing to me and one I would most like to try! :detective:
I'll be back soon!
Thanks for this new form! Cheers! Cleo :sun:
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Jan 7 05, 08:24
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Thank you for your kind words, James... and I hope you change your mind and try some of these yourself!
Cleo, I'll be looking forward to your return to put your flair into a couple!
deLightingly, Daniel
daDUM
dumb down my poet’s tree so you can swing with simple boughing, meting out my feet-steps one by one across your page ‘til all have seen I’ve tried your patience, yet you still go stretching out your mind until ~ duh!
© Daniel J Ricketts 21 Dec 2004
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Aug 1 22, 08:46
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Hello Daniel, I saw your contest on AP about 9 months ago but wasn't quick-witted enough to enter before it closed. I was intrigued by your new form and thought I would give it a try. You know me; I always have to make a difficult form even more so. I was able to hash out two double acrostic 49er Nuggets. I wanted to have you see them first because it it your creation. Hope they meet with your approval: SOME GOLD IS NOT – LOOK IN A MIRROR
Fool Scold
School ought to mentor so each man will seek guidance, not ennui of a foolish question like “Does gold have an aura?” Digging a hole may seem in vein, or did I spell it wrong for new miner? Ore’s no tour!
DASHING DREAMS – GENTLY ON A WHIM
Dirt Pour
Dig a hole somewhere when hoping to get instant riches will never help you or pay good money. Your search is so damned wasteful that you can raze an area... Each day you plow an old patch more; I scream.
Let me know what you think! Larry
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Aug 8 22, 08:00
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Heavens, Larry! I don't know how you do this! I doubt that I could match your ingenuity!
P.S. In your second one, your ninth line has one too many syllables.
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Aug 8 22, 09:27
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Hey Daniel, thanks for your input and for catching my pronunciation error. I was pronouncing "ruin" like "rune". It was a southern thang. It is now edited and has an even better description of the process of mining.
Larry
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Aug 8 22, 21:33
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Daniel, here is another one I wrote today for your perusal and perhaps amusement. A GRIPE I HAVE IS – ANTI-EARTH WORK Wrong Vessel A golden- rule moment I have when I perceive how we waste environments are a instance of karma’s answer, helping to show you that avarice will match value. Don’t throw earth or go in your sink.
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Aug 9 22, 02:27
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I promise not to go in my sink!!chic ‘n’ livers
eat hearty, drink it in and be merry; you only live once… but you can persevere when you’re a moderator on most TV game shows while you’re a thinner but broad grinner and can stay that way long
© MLee Dickens’son
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Aug 10 22, 11:58
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Daniel, I wrote this especially for you and what you are now going through. I do hope everything is successful and it will be an end to your unceasing pain. I am sure that your daily pain severely detracts from your ability to share your beautiful poetry with others and the surcease of what you face would be a blessing to us all.AMPUTATION IS A – LEG UP ON NO PART A TASTE OF PIECE
All may be providing unguent to you to help the pain stop and it’s what you must do to live your life without pain. I pray for the day when only thoughts go to nerves, and that cup includes a sip for art.
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Aug 10 22, 16:11
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I'm so honored that you should write another of your fantastic double acrostic pieces just for me, Larry. I'm really quite moved. Thank you! deLighting in your ability and looking forward not be be distracted by pain and having to sit in the same spot most of the day, Daniel
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Aug 10 22, 17:34
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Daniel,
I do hope you didn't mind the bad pun in the title "piece" for "peace". It was all I could come up with to imply that you were giving up a piece of yourself to obtain some peace for yourself. I am thrilled that you felt honored by my little bit of wordsmithing and my prayers will go with you through the coming days and also the recuperating process. As my sweet wife always said, we will keep a candle burning for you.
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Aug 11 22, 09:57
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Yes, I did pick up on the very adept piece/piece usage... and I appreciate the candles too, my good friend!
piece of leg will support the prosthetic with which I'll soon walk after weeks of rehab during which I'll gain balance to prevent my falling kersplat on my face or my tookis disrupting sense of peace
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Aug 12 22, 20:02
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RECUPERATIONS – TYPE A LONG TOME WADS WORTH Rest each day cannot stop use of your verse. Penning plethora ensures that when you fall, ripped up papers will help to allay pain or hurt when they are cushioning. It pillows butt or face to no harm site
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Aug 12 22, 20:27
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Now that is extremely creative, Larry, and of course in a double acrostic... but methinks in thie one you've lost the flow of sensible thought? Don't understand part of it, especially the closing! sLightly in the dark and running out of time for this evening, Daniel
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Aug 13 22, 07:31
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Sorry Daniel, didn't mean to be so obtuse. Yes, it was a reach but I hope my explanation will clarify. To start, WADS WORTH denotes what numerous wads of paper would be worth in breaking possible falls. If there are enough of them, they will pile up around your desk to cushion and to keep your face or butt from hitting the floor. The ending, "no harm site" denotes the areas around your desk where falls may occur and which are covered by ripped up and wadded pieces of paper. I know it is based on a cartoon picture in my mind where "foot-thick" piles of paper, "which you probably don't use", form cushions around the desk although you seem to be the type of person who makes sure everything goes in the trashcan and not on the floor. Like me, you type most, if not all your writing on the computer. I got the idea for this one from your last entry of going "kersplat" on your face or "tookis". Sorry about the confusion and hope the explanation doesn't detract too much from my efforts to amuse. Larry with a mental condition!
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Aug 13 22, 12:20
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mind- bending paper wads pile around you in case you slip off your revolving desk chair so keep penning and wadding pieces that make no sense in case something does and you can type new poem for my smile
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Aug 14 22, 12:39
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SMILE THROUGH A... – PAINFUL ORDERS
PRAISE PHASE
Slurp more tea is what I like before dawn. Everything’s great if there is no need for you holding Eileen or the wall. Real progress sees you go on stairs, cross the floor, using your bed... God’s love gave help for aches!
Hope those aches go away soon.
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Aug 15 22, 06:17
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My brain is currently to unfocused to take on a double acrostic, Larry! I'm amazed at yours.candlin’ the win’d
flame flickers catching wind of dark hearsay his wick had been lit before new gold holder had embraced him, altaring now tapering his plans for upstanding life to burn slowly eloquent to wax out
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Aug 15 22, 15:47
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WINDOWS OPENED – SEE YOUR FUTURE PAIN’S PANES What’s inside negates the difficulty of your choice to do what is required so you see clearly, as though a door opened up by yourself permits that new you exit from hurt. New milieu. Ease. Your Due!
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