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Feb 8 04, 01:21
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A rictameter is short form of poetry, which uses nine lines. The 1st and last lines are the same. The lines are developed by syllable count, which is as follows:
line 1 - 2 syllables - same as line 9 line 2 - 4 syllables line 3 - 6 syllables line 4 - 8 syllables line 5 - 10 syllables line 6 - 8 syllables line 7 - 6 syllables line 8 - 4 syllables line 9 - 2 syllables - same as line 1
They can be lots of fun when you challenge yourself to use meter and a rhyme scheme, although the poetry form does not insist on either. Have fun!
EXAMPLE:
A Son To His Father
Father console me now: Though I stand here a man, I am but a boy lost beneath a soldier’s attire...still mourning a loss I learned to grieve in younger days, when you were strong and I was not yet a father.
EJD Good AdviceIn morn when I awoke I clearly understood what had been confusing last night. I had been so ready to disagree ... Perhaps the docs are all correct when saying we must sleep to awake refreshed in morn? © D R Harris - 7 February 2004 Now it's your turn to try one. C'mon .. they're fun! Here's to fun writing, Athena
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Yes, Dolly, they can be fun... A muse will stir ewe up; it’s faun’d of satyrs too. Can’t see the forest for the trees? Well, don’t give up! Acorn is all I knead to fill or sophic’ly reflect upon a subject here attempting to amuse.
© Daniel J Ricketts 07 Nov 2003 or descriptive... A rose slowly opens delicate fragrances while petals beautifully unfold, exposing stemmed sweethearts in ornate urns yet freely mingling baby's breath with mature greenery once fresh waters arose.
© Daniel J Ricketts 06 April 2003 or dreamily romantic... Adrift, I Stare Awake
Adrift I find you here beside me where you were when we'd begun to slowly move our lips, then more, so liquidly until most quietly you'd slipped upon me, undulating there to find my gaze adrift.
I stare at ebon eyes then on inside of you to find that sweet serenity I've come to cherish so in fleeting words we too infrequently have shared while yearning yet for more, so here in mist I stare.
Awake again with you amazed how much you love in ways I'd never dared to dream, with such capacity and radiant warmth, a hearth, security and peace a living, breathing joy each day when I awake.
© M Lee Dickens' son 29 April 2003 even haiku-like reflective...
blossom faded though fair yet withered of a hope only yesterday emblazoned on opulently hued petals, fiery sweet scents permeating a warm breeze now stale, acrid, hanging from a tear-streaked blossom
© Daniel J Ricketts 22 May 2003 and much more...
but yes, they are fun to write, and they can spawn creativity. Soooooo... write on!
lovin' deLight, Daniel
P.S. What a wonderful first rictameter yours is! Keep it up, Ms Athena!
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Adorning Dawn
Sunrise wakens creatures to her sparkling splendors, casting chaotic stimuli feeding firmaments of glitter and glee on cushioned clouds. Dreams dwindle, sleep struggles unrelenting. Subservient sunrise.
© 2004 Lorraine M Kanter
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Feb 8 04, 19:20
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Hi Daniel!!
Heyyy Daniel, no one will ever call YOU stingy!! Six Rictameters!!! And all good ... sheeeesssshhh ... and here I think it's a big deal to even write one!! Most of these are very thought provoking, too, but all are superb!! Thank you!!
Hi Lori,
That's a wonderful Rictameter! Hmmmm wonder why I'm the only one to recently "discover" them? Thank you, Lori, you seem to do everything well that you set your hand to. Thank you!
Hi Alan,
Thanks for making a monkey of me, my friend! I really don't remember that other thread. I'll get busy and move them all in together, methinks. Thanks for pointing it out to me ... you're so sweet...
Always trying to learn, Dolly
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A rictameter is short form of poetry, which uses nine lines. The 1st and last lines are the same. The lines are developed by syllable count, which is as follows:
line 1 - 2 syllables - same as line 9 line 2 - 4 syllables line 3 - 6 syllables line 4 - 8 syllables line 5 - 10 syllables line 6 - 8 syllables line 7 - 6 syllables line 8 - 4 syllables line 9 - 2 syllables - same as line 1
They can be lots of fun when you challenge yourself to use meter and a rhyme scheme, although the poetry form does not insist on either. Have fun!
EXAMPLE:
A Son To His Father
Father console me now: Though I stand here a man, I am but a boy lost beneath a soldier’s attire...still mourning a loss I learned to grieve in younger days, when you were strong and I was not yet a father.
EJD
HI Liz - just centering this one for ya! Cleoi
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Aug 4 03, 05:09
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OOhhhh Thanks Liz!
Here's one of mine (remember this one?):
Adorning Dawn
Sunrise wakens creatures to her sparkling splendors, casting chaotic stimuli to feed firmaments of glitter and glee on cushioned clouds. Dreams dwindle, sleep struggles subservient. Unrelenting sunrise.
© Lorraine M Kanter 17 April 2003
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Aug 4 03, 18:40
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QUOTE Here's a new one:
Do you remember me? ...My blushing cheeks aglow, the whisper of your soft hello would kindle my darkest lustful longings then you'd fly away, come morning. I miss you once again so I pretend ~ do you?
Very lovely Liz!
A great example with an aliterative flair! :love:
Awesome! Lori
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Aug 12 03, 22:54
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Nothing Compares
Her heart at times, is weak. Compelled by love...she'll seek, all greater gifts by far, would fail to please her more than he. As others pale; when she compares his poetry. With words, like art, he paints the canvas of... her heart.
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Aug 13 03, 05:33
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QUOTE (AMETHYST @ Aug. 12 2003, 23:54) Nothing Compares
Her heart at times, is weak. Compelled by love...she'll seek, all greater gifts by far, would fail to please her more than he. As others pale; when she compares his poetry. With words, like art, he paints the canvas of... her heart.
Absolutely lovely!!!! :tophat:
Cheers!
:love:
We love adding tiles like this pretty one! :angel:
Thankies! Luvs!
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Aug 22 03, 18:08
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Chartered Footpaths
Walking on earthen floor coursing chartered footpaths, I veer off track to a place where heavy burdens relinquish with each step. Nature's spirited song breathes birth and harmonizes paths pioneered by walking.
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Sep 9 03, 08:27
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That night, the moon lit sky in crimson red--had bled pear shaped tears for her broken heart, to wash away her pain and mend her faith. The moon; sole witness of her blush when she had fell in love and he slayed her, that night
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Sep 12 03, 07:46
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Ego got in his way; appeared to be the best at almost everything he tried, yet always wanted everyone to know. But who knows, since he disappeared? Balloon one day ka-boomed! No queries, Where’d ‘e go?
© Daniel J Ricketts 12 Sept 2003
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Sep 12 03, 16:36
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QUOTE (Just Daniel @ Sep. 12 2003, 08:46) Ego got in his way; appeared to be the best at almost everything he tried, yet always wanted everyone to know. But who knows, since he disappeared? Balloon one day ka-boomed! No queries, Where’d ‘e go?
© Daniel J Ricketts 12 Sept 2003 Where is that masked man? :wall:
Ahhh -so GOOD to see you posting at Mosaic! Please, more more! :wizard: :dance:
Cheers! ~Cleo :pharoah: :pharoah2 :cloud9:
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Sep 12 03, 16:37
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QUOTE (AMETHYST @ Sep. 09 2003, 09:27) That night, the moon lit sky in crimson red--had bled pear shaped tears for her broken heart, to wash away her pain and mend her faith. The moon; sole witness of her blush when she had fell in love and he slayed her, that night
Ahhhhh Amethyst! :lovie:
VERY surreal! I love it! You know me, I like (tasteful) controversy!
Well done!
~Cleo :pharoah:
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Sep 12 03, 21:08
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Well, you asked for it, LorII!
Here's one I've not posted anywhere:
Adrift, I Stare Awake
Adrift I find you here beside me where you were when we'd begun to slowly move our lips, then more, so liquidly until most quietly you'd slipped upon me, undulating there to find my gaze adrift.
I stare at ebon eyes but on inside of you to find that sweet serenity I've come to cherish so in fleeting words we too infrequently have shared while yearning yet for more, so here in mist I stare.
Awake again with you amazed how much you love in ways I'd never dared to dream, with such capacity and glowing warmth, a hearth, security and peace a living, breathing joy each day when I awake.
© M Lee Dickens' son 29 April 2003
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QUOTE (Just Daniel @ Sep. 12 2003, 22:08) Well, you asked for it, LorII!
Here's one I've not posted anywhere:
Adrift, I Stare Awake
Adrift I find you here beside me where you were when we'd begun to slowly move our lips, then more, so liquidly until most quietly you'd slipped upon me, undulating there to find my gaze adrift.
I stare at ebon eyes but on inside of you to find that sweet serenity I've come to cherish so in fleeting words we too infrequently have shared while yearning yet for more, so here in mist I stare.
Awake again with you amazed how much you love in ways I'd never dared to dream, with such capacity and glowing warmth, a hearth, security and peace a living, breathing joy each day when I awake.
© M Lee Dickens' son 29 April 2003 WOW Daniel!
I didn;t know you had sensuality within you to share?! :huh: :dance:
Nicely done! ~Cleo :pharoah:
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Sep 15 03, 09:33
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<font color='#000000'> QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Sep. 13 2003, 06:29) WOW Daniel! I didn;t know you had sensuality within you to share?! Nicely done! ~Cleo Hmmmm So you must think Eileen is totally bored, huh? ??? on Critiquing
Come back to simply say that you just don’t concur or that you’d rather let it stay as a fleeting moment’s inspiration now memorialized in words so sacred that your gut bellows some crude comeback.
© Daniel J Ricketts 15 Sept 2003 </font>
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[/b] QUOTE (Just Daniel @ Sep. 15 2003, 09:33) ORIGINALon Critiquing
Come back to simply say that you just don’t concur or that you’d rather let it stay as a fleeting moment’s inspiration now memorialized in words so sacred that your gut bellows some crude comeback.
© Daniel J Ricketts 15 Sept 2003 Here's a complete REVISION of the previous post: Conscentsual Critiquing
Come back to simply share how you cannot concur or that you’d rather let it lie a fleeting moment’s inspiration gone somehow memorialized in words ineffable – your bowels let out a crude comeback.
© Daniel J Ricketts 11 Oct 2003
Note:
If concentual = possessing harmony, accordant
and consensual = (agreement) existing by consent
then must not conscentsual = ascent toward harmony existing with a distinct air about it ?
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Oct 11 03, 08:57
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<font color='#000000'>And another example of rictameter, since several have been asking about the form: Back to My Roots
What's wrong? Would you believe that I have been depressed? "But how could you be sad?" you ask. I've always felt that I must be the best to ever be worth anything. How wrong, it seems, I've been! His love accepts what's wrong.
All right: perfectionists are moved to take control of all perceived as dangerous; 'survival' comes from doing things just so, contorting to avoid all hurts. It never was enough; I couldn't do all right.
Holy means set apart. none other has this place; it is reserved for You alone. There's no one.. no thing... compares with You. No matter what woos otherwise I cease to shrink from You; I give myself wholly.
Transformed cannot take place by coup, or overnight. There will be struggles, pain ahead. I must go through them daily, step by step . . . in place of constant busy-ness, and then, in brokenness, just walk with God transformed.
How deep should my faith go? How real is what I've been? Do I live out what I believe? "God faithful is, Who brings it all to pass" . . . not superficiality! So when God says, "Dive in," I'll only ask, "How deep?"
© Daniel J Ricketts 25 May 2003 </font>
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