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Aphrodite
post Mar 3 07, 12:37
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I want to pull my body up from
my toes and over my head,

so I am inside out. To hide eyes of
self-deprecation and ears blasting

with screams of lies and deception.

I want to bury the foul stench of hypocrisy
heaped high on plates of selfishness,

which paralyzes from dishonesty
as my skin crawls with sneaky spiders

leaving every hair standing.

To be small and inanimate,
let me feel nothing, let my heart be hollow

to never bleed.

Like a bouncing ball, round and perfectly
unnoticed,

I want to roll away and hide.
©Linda Balboni 2007


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Cleo_Serapis
post Mar 4 07, 12:36
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WOW Lindi - what a poignant piece!

The Narrator is this one is certainly at odds and you've written each word so meticulously and with much thought behind them.

This is certainly an eye-opening in the voice portrayed.

Well done!
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Aphrodite
post Mar 6 07, 17:33
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QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Mar 4 07, 17:36 ) *
WOW Lindi - what a poignant piece!

The Narrator is this one is certainly at odds and you've written each word so meticulously and with much thought behind them.

This is certainly an eye-opening in the voice portrayed.

Well done!
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Hi Lori, Snowflake.gif

I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment so thoroughly on my piece.

Thanks a bunch and stay warm!

Lindi


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