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Nov 19 19, 05:25
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in long winter, heave all the snow off your sidewalk or just stay inside letting fat accumulate so you can't walk when spring comes
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Dec 12 19, 00:02
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you can’t walk in springs without getting your feet wet and oozing mud clings until dried, then it will set and you’ll have feet of clay yet.
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Dec 12 19, 04:01
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you'll have feet of clay if you pretend to be strong could collapse in heap of bricks and powdered mortar interspersed with ivy sprigs
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Dec 26 19, 11:12
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QUOTE (JustDaniel @ Dec 12 19, 06:01 ) you'll have feet of clay if you pretend to be strong could collapse in heap of bricks and powdered mortar interspersed with ivy sprigs Hi Daniel, haven't been here for ages. I like your tanka, highly original. But ouch! Not for me. LOL. Deftly worded. Hope you had a peaceful Christmas. Best wishes, Sylvia
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Dec 27 19, 23:42
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Great to see you visiting in Karnak, Sylvia!
Actually my latest tanka (a game with me and Larry, where we take part of the last line of the previous tanka to start a new one) is precisely what was happening to the chimney of hour house in Bridgeton. When we put on a new roof, the whole upper part of the chimney was simply a bunch of bricks stacked on each other, since the mortar had been eaten away by the residual of natural gas that was going through the chimney from our heaters and water heater. Our workers threw the bricks one or two at a time over our hedge into the neighboring property, where we cleaned them up and stacked them for later use. We had to put in a stainless steel liner which we had made by a local person and our guys installed it with some difficulty. Saved the main structure of the chimney by the stabilization with the liner and our redoing some of the mortar and parging and then painting the chimney, removing all the ivy that was growing on it as well. It could have been a huge mess!
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Jul 16 22, 15:31
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Interspersed with twigs is what's left of my garden after the wild pigs had wreaked it without pardon. Shared one with the game warden.
just slipping in for a moment.
Thanks for the heads-up. It is now a proper Tanka.
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Aug 8 22, 08:08
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Your line four is a syllable short for the typical tanka.
Shared with game warden Larry's gun activity He's setting a trap expecting to capture him to get a hunting licence
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Aug 9 22, 18:59
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A hunting license requires some prerequisites; the desire to kill and possession of a gun. Otherwise, it ain’t no fun.
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Aug 9 22, 23:57
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Havin' pain ain't fun nor is an amputation but it disappears along with neuropathy when the right leg gets cut off!
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Aug 10 22, 17:49
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Right leg gets cut off which is a drastic measure but one can not scoff when this action brings pleasure; for we’re blessed with mind’s treasure.
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Aug 11 22, 10:04
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minding our treasure could devolve into hoarding if we lose our mind... which for me'd be a problem since I haven't found it yet!
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Aug 12 22, 15:51
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I haven’t found it because memory’s hazy so I’ll just admit neither of us is lazy. It’s a short trip to crazy
Thanks for the heads-up! It is now edited and grammatically correct.
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Aug 12 22, 20:20
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Ah, a rhyming tanka! Great job, Larry...
and by the way it's "neither of us IS lazy."
taking a short trip to gather my Rollator I visit the store put boxed groceries on seat to transport to van then home
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Aug 13 22, 08:31
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Daniel, I had to pause for a while because your Tanka brought to mind Ginger using her wheeled walker everywhere she went, including while at home. I was saddened by another melancholic reminder of the impaired mobility she dealt with each day. The walker and her canes are now donated to the Physical Therapy facility she used for the last few years. Hope you progress to the point where your "Rollator" is of no further use and can also be donated. My penchant for the rhyming Tanka is just a way of adding another degree of difficulty to an otherwise descriptive form I love.
To transport then home, I had to fold up and lift her walker to roam. It has become P.T.’s gift and I hope she is not miffed.
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Aug 13 22, 12:12
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she's surely not miffed for it's being used again very thoughtful gift surely they have handymen to service it now and then
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Aug 14 22, 11:03
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Service now and then is where I should be going for our plan was when improvements started showing, that’s blessings He’s bestowing
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Aug 14 22, 12:42
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He bestows blessing even when we're not looking Best we're not messing with our destiny, booking trips before dinner's cooking
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Aug 14 22, 17:43
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Looks like it is rhyme time in Tanka town!
Trips before dinner when you’re fishing on the lake might be a winner if you catch fish you can bake; it’s a chance you have to take!
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Aug 14 22, 17:56
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chancy on the lake if you don't wear a life vest do it for my sake it's more than I could digest to have a funeral fest!
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Aug 14 22, 19:29
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A funeral fest is normally called a wake but I lost the best and that pain I cannot take; it’s His decision to make
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