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  Oct 16 08, 10:27
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I would like to Nominate Sylvias Love's Dues for the IBPC. To me it is poignent, it rings a resonance in my soul, has an enternal rythm and song. Every time I read it, another part reaches out and pulls me in.
LOVE’S DUES by Sylvia Maclagan He left yesterday. Images of fallow roads puncture solitude, then fade. The sun erodes my thoughts like a dry sponge. They grow dim - love’s tendrils wind their way around my heart to build on solid ground a world apart that may, by gentle force, go on and round him. The sky is not my friend today; it casts a garish spell on dales and dreams. It counterpoises Camelot. O give my life a joyous plot! I’m heartbroken, quite unwell, denizen prisoner of inner space where only elves dare tread and trim with lace my memory of him; a rejected pawn with bunker-shaped dome, afraid of dawn. Weary nomad by my love accursed, quarrying sadness and thirst in uninhabited plateaus. My life dissolves in threads... Deities! Seers! Read the riddle of subterranean fears, my eggshell life. Players in this game deserve three lives, and I, poltroon, dare not pursue the sentimental lane with one puny chance of earthly gain. To fall in line might take a thousand years burrowing through love’s harsh confines- Is it I who writes these lines? Yet shining softly on my bed, mock moon, a gray, autumnal calm spreads down my spine, has stilled the pain, my oaths may undermine. Aphrodite should have sung last rites to my deadly wounds -- my heart’s plight. © Sylvia Maclagan, Buenos Aires, Argentina, 2008. This post has been edited by Cleo_Serapis: Dec 30 08, 08:59
Reason for edit: Revised version posted
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Oct 16 08, 15:22
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 1,621 Joined: 18-August 05 From: Johannesburg, South Africa Member No.: 127 Real Name: Beverleigh Gail Annegarn Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Jox |
Well, I second this nomination, Steve, this poem is superb. Syl is it true????? I get a hint or more of the truth here??? You are a brave girl!
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Oct 16 08, 17:05
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
I agree! I was going to nominate this one today and Steve beat me to it!
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner           |
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Oct 16 08, 21:49
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 8,887 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
Why, thank you, Steve! What a wonderful surprise....mmmm.....I still need to go over some bits (Lori gave me some good pointers yesterday), but of course I'm delighted with the Nom.
 Bev, I can't remember any specific boyfriend banging the door on me, or making me feel like a dry sponge...LOL....but maybe this poem is a recopilation of those long lost loves (or imagined ones) of my youth. Who knows? Perhaps the exaggerated tone comes from adolescent dramas!! Anyhoo...I feel it's sort of written for the stage...Know any playwrights who'd contact me and pay me a billion dollars?!  Seriously, thanks a lot, hugs to you all, Syl*** 
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The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner     |
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Oct 22 08, 05:14
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi Sylvia,
Looks like your poem was the only one nominated for November's comp. You still have until November 1st to make revisions. If you feel it's not ready to go yet, then let me know at that time and we'll hold it off until the following month. HUGS Lori ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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