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Larry
post May 20 09, 00:57
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Peggy, you asked for it so here are a couple.


Listen Slower

In the South where the vowels are round
And gentility’s worth we expound
You’ll hear Mom ‘n ‘em say,
“Y’all come back, straight away!”
Northern ears don’t hear words, just a sound!


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Conservation

Way down south where life’s pace is a crawl
Some folks think that we talk with a drawl
But we’re trying to curb
Excess use of a verb
And pronouns when we’re asking, “How Y’all”?



Note: Last line of Conservation was "And some nouns..." which has been edited.


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post May 20 09, 06:57
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Teehee! rofl.gif

These are great Larry! Glad to see y'all can make fun of yer accents! grinning.gif

Enjoyed!
~Cleo LOL.gif


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Hi Larry,

I just love the title "Listen Slower"!!!!! Ha!! Ha! rollerskater.gif rollerskater.gif rollerskater.gif rollerskater.gif rollerskater.gif

These made me smile from ear to ear! Great job!! rollerskater.gif rollerskater.gif rollerskater.gif rollerskater.gif rollerskater.gif

I have one nit: You used the word "noun" in the following line. To be correct, you should have used the word "pronoun" because "y'all" is a contraction of "you all," and "you" is a "pronoun", not a "noun."



And some nouns when we’re asking, “How Y’all”?


Larry, thanks so much for posting these!!! I got a kick out of them!!!

Peggy


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post May 21 09, 11:29
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Hey, Larry, I talk like this when I go home to visit. Fun writes!
 
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post May 21 09, 19:07
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Hi Lori, Peggy & Mayo,

Glad to see y'all was pleased with'em. Lori, we don't have accents! I understand everything I hear down in Louisiana. When I go up north though, people act like they have way too much to say and not enough time to say it. They talk too fast and have some very peculiar communication skills. Some use more hand and arm gestures than they use their mouths.

Peggy, thanks for the heads up on the noun/pronoun "snafu". It will be fixed after I post this.

Mayo, if you talk like that when you come home to visit, you most likely talk like that when you return from your visit. Your friends are just too nice to let you know. Besides, there is nothing sweeter or more pleasant to the ear than the sound of a "Southern Belle" talking. Even if she is mad and calling you names, it's still music to me.

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post May 22 09, 07:56
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larry, is that why my man smiles every time i loose it?
 
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QUOTE (Larry @ May 20 09, 12:57 ) *
Peggy, you asked for it so here are a couple.


Listen Slower

In the South where the vowels are round
And gentility’s worth we expound
You’ll hear Mom ‘n ‘em say,
“Y’all come back, straight away!”
Northern ears don’t hear words, just a sound!


-----------------------------------


Conservation

Way down south where life’s pace is a crawl
Some folks think that we talk with a drawl
But we’re trying to curb
Excess use of a verb
And pronouns when we’re asking, “How Y’all”?



Note: Last line of Conservation was "And some nouns..." which has been edited.


Larry,

I love the second limerick, what a great opening line! In the first limerick, I think you could do better with the two dimeter lines.

Mark


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post May 26 09, 00:54
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Hey Mayo & Mark,

Thanks for stopping by.

Mayo, you are probably correct in your assessment of why "your man" smiles. I just had to write this limerick for you:

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Once a sweet Belle with southern accent
Curled men’s hair when she wanted to vent.
With results from her ire,
Lips and voice did conspire.
Her man’s smile was the only extent


Mark, my intent was to poke fun at the way we talk down her, so I thought of a number of dimeter combinations for that first limerick but thought I'd just post one of them to see if anyone had some other suggestions. Here are a couple more for you to peruse

In the South where the vowels are round
And gentility’s worth we expound
There's the unspoken word
That's between what occurred

Northern ears don’t hear meaning, just sound


or

In the South where the vowels are round
And gentility’s worth we expound
“grits ’n aigs” is a meal
and “m’on baak” an appeal

Northern ears don’t hear words, just sound!


I've a few more but these might be enough for now. Hope it's better!

Larry


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post May 26 09, 01:01
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QUOTE (Larry @ May 26 09, 12:54 ) *
In the South where the vowels are round
And gentility’s worth we expound
“grits ’n aigs” is a meal
and “m’on baak” an appeal

Northern ears don’t hear words, just a sound!



Larry, I think that this one is much, much better! The other version didn't make it for me.

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post May 26 09, 07:14
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Ha Ha Ha!

Too funny Larry - I like 'em both. You got a problem with us northerners, eh? laugh.gif I hear just fine over these parts...

Too funny
~Cleo rofl.gif


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post May 26 09, 10:29
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Larry, when in the south, I hear just fine, though sometimes I still laugh inside. But as a regional feast, you can't beat the beast, of a Yankee 'a'yup the caa paak's ova there, just dawn th' raad a piss. Have some carn it's wicked good, a'yup.'
We can all laugh at our own accents.
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post May 27 09, 00:13
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Hi Mark, Lori & Steve,

Thanks for coming by for a grin or two. Mark, glad you like the "grits 'n aigs" line. I had one other version which stays with our problem of communication down South.

In the South where the vowels are round
And gentility’s worth we expound
Though all try to converse
Language problems get worse
Causing consternation that's profound.

Lori, the only problem I have in any part of this country is understanding the vernacular and colloquialisms of that particular area; especially "Baastin".

Steve, you have written exactly what I mean. You might write a retort utilizing your penchant for being able to spell what you hear. I nearly came back and asked you, HUH???

Larry


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post May 27 09, 09:00
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Very funny, Larry. Thanks.

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Larry, sounds like a challenge...hmmm maybe a short story instead of a limerick.
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