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 Sep 5 03, 02:25
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The Dawn of Surrender
You are the long evening, the deepest night. …sweet dawn you are not. In your embrace I’m not reborn and the future is bleak. I know well that a night spent with you gives birth to bitter regrets. a promise not to seek you won’t help, for I love you more than life itself. the blue hour casts long shadows and I can’t resist its alluring echo. Our lair is a not feather of tenderness, but thorns of demanding ferocity. A pact we made in a church, which reeked of burnt wicks and desiccated roses, the redolence of death… The name of our love is …Agony, we can’t but stop clawing each other asunder. |
  
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Sep 5 03, 05:09
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Why hello Oscar! :grinning:
 WELCOME TO THE MOSAIC!  :dance: :sun:Interesting poem filled with cool imagery and a stark message. This forum is for famous writer works. Who is the author of this piece? Perhaps, it was an oversight? IF your own, you can post this one for critique in either Homer's Homilies (gentle) or Socrate's Synapse (Complex) OR in Poseidon’s Poetry for interpretation only as you wish. Please let me know and I can move it for to another forum. Cheers!  ~Cleo :pharoah: ·······  ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner           |
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Oct 13 03, 08:53
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Greetings Jan.
I'd know that style anywhere. You still carry the art of sweet talking mixed (sometimes) with a portent of deepest melancholy. Here we are then. Deep in the heart of Lower Egypt. And a long, long way from home. A. |
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