Hi, Sergio,
I'm surprised this hasn't received any comments so far, I really enjoyed it. It is far more accessible than some of your other pieces, more 'user friendly' if you understand me. I don't have any nits as such but would like to point to a few areas where you might consider alternatives. Strophe 1 is wonderful as is, I wouldn't change anything here.
QUOTE
I ask: Is there anyone
willing to put their hand in place of mine
on the chopping block, or their signature on paper
to demand investigations into all that has been stolen
on my passage through this life?
In line 1/2 here, I think that 'willing' would have more impact as part of l1; just lose 'there' and bump 'willing' up.
QUOTE
I have not seen tenderness,
nor do I feel excitement upon observing
the child fed from the safety of its mother's hands.
Only the rumors of the existence of distant cities,
where harsh winters outlast serene summers,
accelerate the rhythm of my blood.
That chill is mine.
I like this strophe too but line 4 stops me a little - I wonder if you need 'of the existence' here; I can see the difference you're making - that the existence is in question - but doesn't the reader understand that anyway? I also think you could lose 'the' before 'rumours without detracting from the sense of the line.
QUOTE
I, who have never seen self-assurance, have played
with water and snow. I've wrapped them around
my legs, given them form with my hands like a lover.
Another good strophe but 'seen' in l1 jars a little - surely we've all seen this in others, at least ostensible displays of same?; 'known' would work there for sense and give the invisible alliteration with 'never' thanks to the silent 'k'. Did enjoy the rest of this strophe, swimming and snow angels?
The last strophe is really strong, particularly the second part, nothing but 'kudos' for that.
Jim