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Dec 21 03, 09:50
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Just Leaving
On Thursday we leave for home, a stopover in a quiet town we lived in the valley of the shadows just the two of us Cæsar and me.
One curiosity about that place one had to worry about the encounter always a question of the mind and the matter there was this problem of the masks and a thing about machines.
As usual, the passerby who was indebted to the little people, whose endless sounds and silences wailing about the new exhibit, never ceased.
He would emerge from the shelter, timing the arrival just as the monsters are due on Maple street. Would approach the both of us…muttering.. come wander with me.
His famous line.. “I am the night- color me black” here to serve man and all who come with the gift I possess, It’s a good life.
Even that little girl lost, who thinks she is queen of the nile sees me in the eye of the beholder whispering, no time like the past for us all to meet.
After all, it was.. in his image he portrayed us all the doppelganger... from the other side..
“There is a fifth dimension, beyond that which is known to man. It is a dimension as vast as space and as timeless as infinity. It is the middle ground between light and shadow, between science and superstition”. Rod Serling
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Dec 21 03, 16:42
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Larry,
I so enjoyed reading this... Now you've made ponder on taking on the challenges...
I'll see if I will decide...
Daniah
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Dec 21 03, 20:25
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Larry,
Hi,
Do you think you could kindly explain some of the references in this please? I'm having trouble getting it properly. Cheers, James.
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Dec 22 03, 20:07
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Hi Lar!
Ahhh - I love your responses to the challenges! I just put that Twilight Zone one up a few days ago too! :huh:
Now, before I crit, must your snippets remain, or can I crit them too?
Cheers! ~Cleo
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Dec 23 03, 20:32
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Dec 23 03, 20:53
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Larry -
In the Fifth Dimension it is the loo rolls which dance and sing about the bunnies. I thought you knew that?
James.
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