Greetings again, Peggy...
I was almost finished with an even-metered perspective on your wonderful fantasy, but in the midst of some research on something else I ended up passing out of MM and lost all that I'd been playing with! I'll try again, but do remember that I still don't know you well enough to have a feel for what you're looking for in the 'end product' of your works, so I'm merely 'workshopping with you', not necessarily making suggestions, playing with form along with you to see what might happen. I hope that's all right ?
QUOTE(Peggy Carpenter Harwood @ Aug 1 06, 00:33 ) [snapback]80107[/snapback]
A Fantasy
I am sitting in the book shop's small cafe.
I sip, in book shop's small cafe;
You walk in, pause, and look my way.
you saunter in... pause, look my way...
You smile and it takes my breath away.
a smile that takes my breath away.
You walk over.
As you approach...
"Have a coffee if you've got the time."
"A coffee? ... if you have the time."
Is your heart standing still like mine?
Is your heart standing still... as mine?
"Think I will!" sounds so sublime.
Your "Think I will!" sounds so sublime...
You sit down.
and you sit down.
"This is such a great surprise!"
"Wow; this is such a great surprise!"
You don't reply,just look into my eyes.
Your silence looks in through my eyes;
Yours still have the power to hypnotize.
you've still that power to hypnotize.
You take my hand.
You take my hand.
"There's something I want to say."
"There's something, dear, I want to say."
I just listen, never taking my eyes away.
Perked ears can't pull my eyes away.
"Tell me you love me," I want to pray.
Tell me, "I love you," feel me pray...
You do.
and then... you do!
I have no idea whether this is of any assistance to you, but please know that it was fun. You helped me to enter right into the midst of this fantasy. I am not used to doing that, so you've helped me whether or not I've helped you!
deLighting in the process, Daniel B)