Sigmund, Viking slow read free form Options

[Arnfinn]

Sigmund

Sigmund
his peacock eyes
ablaze,
hand on the hilt.
Eleven men
tried the tensile trace,
from the stout oaks,
centred deep embrace.

A grip,
his green eyes
acid,
call a supple sweep.
The blade
a sliding spectre fell,
transcends the trunks,
Odin’s sutured spell.

Aloft,
his reflecting eyes
alight,
sword polarised light.
‘Odin’s gift,
a hero of the pantheon.
A magic gilded prize,
for sheath cornelian.'

Old man,
one green eye
eth,
cloak swathe heliotrope.
‘Sigmund
a hero shall walk free,
tread the halls of life,
not to be chosen by the Valkyrie.’

Arnfinn  
[B]

[Guest_Zeus˛_*]

Arnfinn, welcome to MM.
Like the use of metaphors here, and he lives to strike again.
A cunning lot, the vikings.
z2 (Larry)

[Arnfinn]

Hi Larry,

Sigmund was the twin brother of the beautiful Signy ; they were thelst two children of Volsung(the king of the huns). Sigmund was the only one of Volsungs nine brothers to realise that Signy didn't want to marry Siggeir, the king of the Goths. However, Odin had a similar idea and turned p for the wedding feast, throwing his sword into the heart of the Brandstock, a great oak that grew up through Volsungs's hall; according to Odin, whoever was able to remove the sword would become a great hero.

Sigmund had a go and immediatly removed the sword from the scabbard imbeded in the tree, thus becomming a Viking hero.

In Odins court at Asgard his female attendents the Valkyrie's choose which Viking Hero's were to be killed in battle.

Odin assured Sigmund that he would not be killed in battle.

Odin often wanderd the world as a hooded one eyed old man.

Thanks for your interest in my poem.

John

[Guest_Zeus˛_*]

John,
there is a little touch of similiarity in Wagners Opera
Der Ring des Nibelungen with four different opera's which constitute the Ring: The Rhinegold, The Valkyrie, Siegfried, and Twilight of the Gods. The names are similiar Siegfried and
Sieglinde. A long and drawn out story, but good msuic.
Thanks for your info.
Larry z2

[Arnfinn]

Interesting Larry,

Have to go into your info.

I wrote my piece to a pattern.

Line 1 relates to Line 3

Line 2 relate to "eyes"

Lines 4,5,6 and 7 tell the story.

John

[Cleo_Serapis]

Oooohhhhhh  :pharoah2

What a very cool poem here Arnie!  :viking:  :grinning:

I found myself captured in the moment and being educated is yet another thrill result you've weaved.

While I admit to being a weeeeeee bit tooo tired, I didn't (on first glance) see anything to nit?    :dance:

Just poppin in to say, Excellent!  :sun:

I'll be certain to re-visit this piece....

Hugs!

[Athena]

Hi John,

Welcome to Mosaic Musings!  
Wowwww a historian!  Super!  Not only will we have the opportunity to read your poetry, but we may learn more about ancient history.  

The first thing I notice about your poem is that I couldn't read it.  You've chosen to use a color so pale I had to highlight it to read.  Other than that, on first look I like the way you've laid the poem out ... unique.

Sigmund

Sigmund
his peacock eyes
ablaze,
hand on the hilt.
Eleven men
tried the tensile trace,
from the stout oaks,
centred deep embrace.
I'm afraid I don't understand what a tensile trace is and what does centered embrace mean?

A grip,
his green eyes
acid,
call a supple sweep. What is a supple sweep?

The blade   I'd recommend a comma here
a sliding spectre fell,
transcends the trunks,
Odin’s sutured spell.
Actually, I don't understand any of the above stanza

Aloft,   "Aloft"?  His eyes left his body?
his reflecting eyes
alight,
sword polarised light.
‘Odin’s gift,
a hero of the pantheon.
A magic gilded prize,
for sheath cornelian.'
Don't understand the last land above.

Old man,
one green eye
eth, "eth"? Is this a typo or does it have some meaning?
cloak swathe heliotrope. What does this line mean?
‘Sigmund
a hero shall walk free,
tread the halls of life,
not to be chosen by the Valkyrie.’
I actually understand these last three lines and think they're very good!

Arnfinn  
[B]

Friend Arnfinn, please forgive my lack of knowledge when it comes to things ancient.

Again, welcome to MM ..!

Blessings,
Athena

[Arnfinn]

Hi Cleo,

Gladest glad yoooooo liked.

Read line 1 with line 3 then go to line 2 for the eyeliner.theeeeeeeeeeeeeen 4567 teeheeeeels da story baybeeeee. heh...heh cough! :blues:

Got to go now, got the 7.30 looooooooooong boat to catch.

Arnie......................the...finn.

[Arnfinn]

Hi Athena,

Re my poem

Tensile = resistance to breaking.....as in tensile steel.
Trace = sword blade. Cunning wot.

'from the stout oaks,
centred deep embrace'

Centred deep embrace = Odin threw his magic sword..........plumb cetred deep into the heart of the oak
tree

Soooo....elven jokers tried to remove the magic sword from the heart of ye olde oak tree....................and failed  


A supple sweep = Sigmund...............hand on the hilt of the sword................gave a supple sweep of his wrist......Bingo....ye olde (MAGIC) sword fell out of the
tree.


Actually dont understand stanza. Well reaaaaaaaaally, humph  

Ok...........a sliding spectre fell,
transcends the trunks,
Odin’s sutured spell.

The blade slide out ghostly......transceding from the heart of the tree............the sword had been flung into the cente of the tree(sutured= clampted into the centre of the tree)
by Odin

Aloft= (See line 3).....Aloft sword polarised light........he held the sword up to the light

The Key to my poem is Read line 1 and then line 3, line 2 is all about eyes, lines 4567 tell the story.

Sheath c= Shoved the sword into his sheath

Easy, just like doing a crossword puzzle.

Glad you liked.

My next extravaganza........coooooooooomes with explanatory notes.

Arnie..............the.......finn










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