[quote name='JustDaniel' date='Jul 29 06, 14:57 ' post='79877']
I'm doing reasonably well, John... in fact I may read this piece at an open mic tonight -- the first on at the store of a friend of mine... after my brand new rider mower died in the middle of the job and having to finish it with a Lawn Boy in sweltering heat... I'm appreciative of your noticing the unapostrophized word that doesn't do that well, so perhaps you could let me know if you know a way!
* Thank you, Arn, for dropping by
with your meter-sensing ear...
made my
air-condish'ner cry.
Thank you, Fin, for dropping by
'postrophizin' that word...
Try!...always comes out lookin' queer.
Thank you, John, for dropping by
with your meter-sensing ear.
Hi Daniel,
* No I dont Mate. Your 13 c Rondel is a humorous play on words. And in my eyes...perfect.
What I'm trying to impart in an imparting way is, three or four verses of the above may turn out an elaborate poem
Unusual RondelUnusual fits best on me;
it's flexible and lets me stray
from norms... allows my mind to play
with words, as anyone can see.
It's strange how form can set one free
inside the lines -- a theme buffet.
Unusual fits best on me;
it's flexible and lets me stray.
That it makes sense... no guarantee...
some orderly... some disarray...
but hear it form a fine bouquet
creating my own bourgeoisie;
unusual fits best on me.
© MLee Dickens/son 29 August 2006Hey, you've excelled here Daniel. As you say a delight. Read this aloud in contrast to your last piece and this poem wins hand down. loved 'bouquet n' bourgeoisie.' Wow, has that ever been done before. Nah, I think it's a first mate.
Hmmm... Delighted by Daniel.John