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 Jul 8 04, 21:51
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 18,578 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori  |
... and now I've gained 3 more pounds back! Did you have to make me look so intensely and make all those other suggestions! It's all YOUR fault!
not-so-Lightly now, Daniel :cool: ·······  ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Jul 8 04, 20:17
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Hi Daniah,
Goodness, gracious, didn't know you had it in you!  This is wonderful. I enjoyed from beginning to end, or should I say admired from head to toe or rather from end to end. The eclair has a chocolate twist! The formatting, the pace, the terse but juicy words were all perfect! I was curious why someone would be named Tropical Kisses…I’ll try not to gaze next time, but then I never do anyway…yeah, right.  David |
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Jan 18 04, 09:58
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
How clever Dani! :pharoah2
What a laugh out loud!  This was a fun read! Even the comedic touch is sensually 'you'! Hugs! ~Cleo ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
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Jan 18 04, 07:36
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Dear Daniel
I don't have enuff fingers and toze to count the number of intertwined puns sprouting out of those 22 syllables ! Absolutely brilliant ! Love Alan PS Not to mention the clever psychological twist you offer ..... |
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Jan 18 04, 06:43
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Nicely done
Gerry. |
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Jan 18 04, 07:08
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,578 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
d'eclair
de truth, Dani! diditgetchewtobuy? izzitheguilthatcauzdjuto right it? delightfully envious, Daniel :sun: ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Dec 1 03, 04:36
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Dear Dani
As an English comedian used to say : Ooooh, you are naughty, but I like it ! The pleas would not work with me, I'd have them all ! Love Alan |
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Dec 1 03, 17:28
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 Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 1,547 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Jeddah, Saudi Arabia Member No.: 13 Real Name: Daniah Writer of: Poetry |
QUOTE (Alan @ Dec. 01 2003, 03:36) Dear Dani As an English comedian used to say : Ooooh, you are naughty, but I like it ! The pleas would not work with me, I'd have them all ! Love Alan :) Alan, Glad you enjoyed the humor in this. I was at a pastry shop and couldn't resist personifying the eclair, adn as you see the rest was history... Dani ······· ·······Happiness is a journey, not a destination.
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Dec 1 03, 03:31
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 1,547 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Jeddah, Saudi Arabia Member No.: 13 Real Name: Daniah Writer of: Poetry |
Dear Sir, I sit here quietly seeming not to notice how your tired blue eyes leer at me. Now if I had a voice like yours, and the courage, I would have demanded you look the other way. Alas! I don't (can't). Dear Sir, Quivering from fear here, I implore you to divert your gaze, look at the one on my right, yes the one in red. She's colorful (so I've heard) I am so pale and drabby in comparison. Or maybe the one on my left. She is round and smells of coconut. They call her Tropical Kisses. Dear Sir, Quit licking your lips that way, they seem to grow wider and somehow the knot of fear, in me, twists tighter. See the one sitting there, beside the man with the coffee cup twisting in his palms? She seems more delightful company! He's smiling, and impatient to have her. Dear Sir, do not point your finger at me like some prize you have earned! Hear my plea! Do not devour me! I'm only a day old. Yes, me, the chocolate eclair. ······· ·······Happiness is a journey, not a destination.
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