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Jul 18 16, 16:14
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Ornate Oracle
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From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia
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Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:David Ting
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My mother-of-pearl shell is greatly admired. It’s hard. No drafts get in. Not even the occasional grain of sand blown in from the sea. I built it up over the years, like a shipbuilder labouring in his shipyard. I used to worry about leakages, those childhood dreams turning their ghostly grins to me at midnight with a scream. The moon sailed by my window, saluting the stars, unaware of my night terrors.
Sometimes, I used to wet my bed. “She’s a bed-wetter”, said my Aunt, in front of my cousins. So I laid on more mother-of-pearl. My skin resented it, turned flaky, then both cheeks froze like a doll’s. I was afraid my cousins would chisel the lacquer to peep inside while I dozed. But that’s done with now. I sleep on...a petrified mollusc, unaware of sea changes.
By Psyche. All rights reserved as a published work. Bariloche, Argentina. 2016
Note: Changed title to "Survival" L1 is now "shell" instead of "coat". S2, L8 now "lacquer" instead of "nacre".
Thank you, Antony!
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Psyche Survival** (used to be My Shell**) Jul 18 16, 16:14 greenwich Interesting confessional poem. The hardened lacque... Jul 22 16, 12:20 Psyche Thank you, Antony,
You're spot on, the poem is... Jul 24 16, 23:11 greenwich Simple change the title, make it more abstract, i... Jul 25 16, 13:39 Psyche I did exactly that, Antony. Plus two other tweaks,... Jul 29 16, 03:01 greenwich Agreed it's a shame the site has lessened in i... Jul 29 16, 11:58 Psyche I thought you might know where they've all flo... Aug 8 16, 03:21 weaver Hi Psyche
You're right where did all the poets... Sep 4 16, 14:39 Psyche Hi weaver,
Ah, well, one has to enjoy the summ... Sep 10 16, 23:12 RC James Syl, Good extended metaphor, but, it's got to ... Nov 23 16, 15:24 Psyche Hi Richard,
Thanks a lot. But why does it have to ... Nov 28 16, 17:06 Eisa Hi Syl,
I like all the changes you have made to t... Dec 7 16, 17:58 Psyche Thanks so much, Eira, for your encouraging comment... Dec 19 16, 00:45 mt2polar Psyche,
You use the metaphor perfectly. As I fin... Dec 13 16, 14:20 Psyche Hi mt2,
Thank you. Good question. I suppose we flo... Dec 19 16, 00:55
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