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Oct 28 03, 10:17
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Dear Cleo
Ha, I have a problem : My haiku, while I hope funny, usually have a serious intent behind them. So do I post twice ?
love Alan
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Oct 28 03, 10:42
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QUOTE (Alan @ Oct. 28 2003, 10:17) Dear Cleo
Ha, I have a problem : My haiku, while I hope funny, usually have a serious intent behind them. So do I post twice ?
love Alan Sure - why not? :cowboy: :grinning: :read: :viking:
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Oct 28 03, 11:20
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Having started writing Haiku, I now can't stop... help!!!
borne on the spindrift a seagull feather takes flight without its owner
footsteps skip lightly child carrying a balloon after the party
sepulchral ship's horn attempting to pierce the fog seeking safe harbour
laughing impishly grand daughter tickles my cheek with butterfly kiss
tipsy butterflies dreamily drunk on pollen all their curtailed lives
through the woodland trees Snow Moon points bone-white fingers at nodding snowdrops
the swing still moving she has run away laughing but she is still missed
soapy bubbles fly puppy, tiring of the chase flops down, falls asleep
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Oct 28 03, 11:59
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Dear Grace
"I now can't stop... help!!!"
Answer : GOOD !
Out of these 8, there were only about 7 I liked. Some I even loved, they give such a concise pinpoint pen picture.
May I suggest ship's horn ? alliteration !
Grace has haiku bug : she is occupied painting pinpoint pen pictures .....
Love Alan
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Oct 28 03, 12:37
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James, thank you for the information. I had no idea of its origin. You've taught me something today.
Grace, your haiku are wonderful. I especially like:
tipsy butterflies dreamily drunk on pollen all their curtailed lives
I find this one has great depth.
I dug up another one of mine.
Salmon fights current Berries lead black bear to stream Fated compulsions
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Oct 28 03, 13:10
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Hello Alan
Thank you. I never could distinguish between ship and boat. Certainly sounds much better now.
This is great fun. I'm sure some of these will lead on to poems, but I am having great fun writing them.
Thanks to you and Michelle for the encouragement.
Love
Grace :farmer: :cloud9:
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Oct 28 03, 17:47
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Dear Grace
"I never could distinguish between ship and boat"
Nor can half the nation, there is a correspondence going on in the D Telegraph just now on this very point.
Bit like the Q "What's the difference between a dog and a flea ?" - "Well, a dog can have fleas, but ....." - generally, a ship can have boats .....
Love Alan
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Oct 28 03, 16:14
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New pasture bride-way 600 foot mud puppies from wetland to here.
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Oct 28 03, 17:53
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Dear Brahms
Not being in the least a country boy, I have to ask
1. what is a bride-way, or do you poss mean bridLe-way ?
2. What's a mud puppy ?
Love Alan
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Oct 28 03, 18:14
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Merging into HAIKU thread.....
Nicely done!
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Oct 29 03, 08:04
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Hey, Grace, you're a natural! Sorry I'm so unnatural! I guess that's why I created my own form, HeadCase Haiku! Sorry, LorII for my cowpie-ing this thread... but looks like someone else just did too?
casting rays of joy sweet voice awakens day’s sun; laughter lingers long
© Daniel J Ricketts 24 March 2003
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WASTE, OR WAIST ?
Hallowe'en's over: Trick is with leftover treats, Wouldn't want to waist .....
Alan Mcalpine Douglas
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Nov 3 03, 03:39
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fall of dignity
trees refuse to leave;
stand stark, arms outstretched
© Daniel J Ricketts 03 Nov 2003
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Nov 6 03, 15:15
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fall beclouds
shadowing daylight, then reigning o’er noon’s parade, what be fall’s clouds? mist?
befogging our daze, they loft, leave a cirrusly cumulous affect
feigning memories their wisp a ring in silence as they diminish
leaving trees baring shivering limbs with trunks packed, but nowhere to go.
© Daniel J Ricketts 04 Oct 2003
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Nov 8 03, 00:27
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December roses brave the kiss of falling snow with sweet submission
Grace
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Nov 8 03, 09:32
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QUOTE (Cybele @ Nov. 07 2003, 23:27) December roses brave the kiss of falling snow with sweet submission Grace My muse has twisted words again, Grace!
Quiet Resign
cold North Sea sailors immerse themselves deeply in covert sub mission
© M Lee Dickens’ son 08 Nov 2003
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Nov 9 03, 08:41
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Nice reading in here!
OK - I'll try one!
Whispers of the wind waltz in perfect unison with rhythmic motion.
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Nov 9 03, 09:26
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QUOTE Whispers of the wind waltz in perfect unison with rhythmic motion.
Nice alliteration Lori, evoking the whoosh of the wind.
Aquilegias stand like tall, elegant ladies in smart, pink bonnets
This is fun! :dance: :dance:
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Nov 10 03, 01:48
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sign: Custard's Last Stand ice cream drive-in furthest south at the Jersey Shore sLightly askew, if you ask me, Daniel
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