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G'day, Cyn.


Longtime since I've hade the pleasure to see your happy smiling face.


The mare appears
inconceivably long, concaved,
carrying five young riders.
The day grayed, though

it could be clear and blue-sky
bright - if not sepia toned.
It must be late autumn or early
spring, the leafless, budless branches

contorted in an unseen wind,
a stubble - corn? - beyond. The kids
grin, gap-toothed, grimy, barefoot, arranged
in ragged graduated size. But I find

I do not wonder much
about these children who must feel chilled
despite the dappled warmth beneath them.
Instead I care about the mare.


What imagery. An old photo.


Could it be a mother with some youngins?


No matter what. A wonderful poem


I'm thrilled to see you back at MM.


jOHN

Cyn, first welcome back its been a long time, second this is wonderful, it reminds me of an old photograph or an old movie before sound, I empathize with the poor old nag, sway backed and having to carry five kids. I will come back to savour this like afine wine.
Steve

Hi Cyn,

Do remember me? I remember you!! Nice to run into you!

I really like this beautiful image you've created!! Quaint and nostalgic!!

Peggy

Hi guys
Thanks for the welcome
This is a photo poem - that is we were asked to find a photo and write about it - within that the reader should be able to "see" the photo, but of course that would not be *all* the poem would contain.

Some great things can come from it. Try one. As you write it, let the photo take you where the poem will eventually go.
I would love to critique some if you do them

Hello Cyn,

This is a good poem. I enjoyed it very much.

Love the ending. I would love to see more of your work.

Vess

Cyn:


Good stuff. I went through it a couple of times trying to find some suggestion I might make..to no avail. The picture is very clear....with maybe the exception of the title. Does it tie to line 6? The reference to "sepia'?
Think I'll try the photo bit.


ace

Hi there Cyn

Welcome back to MM, it's really great to see you again and read your wonderful poetry. This one is no exception and paints a vivid picture. I have only one tiny point ~




I hope this will inspire photo poems from other members.
Don't forget your statutory 2 crits for every one you post - unfortunatley I don't think you'll find any with photographs/pictures ... yet! Do you think you can post your photo here for us to see?

Great to have you back
Snow

Cyn, I know I have a least one that I have written about a photo, can't remember if I posted it here, will see what I find. I know I have a lot that I have written about pictures, just don't remember if they were photos or paintings, do you think we could see the photo this was about? It might inspire someone to write a different way.
Steve

I admire the story of keen observations that unfold throughout this piece.
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I suggest "I do not much wonder." in place of "wonder much.

It's a lovely poignant piece.

DB