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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends  |
GOOD OLD CEMENT
We’ll shoot the breeze and pine for home we’ll beat our chests, hearts throb with pain we’ll permeate these foreign parts and then - we’ll do it all again We’ll breathe mind’s air, tingling of “there” we’ll hale old memories from deep glass we’ll axe the present, shed sweet tears and glorify some ancient past Our flow, it’s one of “Good Old Days” and yet, how was it that we went ? Perhaps small death when we “escaped” what wasn’t faced, set in cement ? Alan McAlpine Douglas Challenge words : breeze pine beat throb permeate breathe tingling hale axe flow ·······  ······· |
  
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Oct 25 10, 14:14
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Hi Alan
I'm sorry no-one has answered earlier, but Steve has given some insight into our problems. I've been in Seren's for most of the time. As to the poem - it is well written, but like Steve I'm a bit confused by the ending. Perhpas you'd enlighten us. Snow 
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Alan GOOD OLD CEMENT Oct 17 10, 00:19 
Alan What a powerful poem this is - brought the whole b... Oct 24 10, 03:16 
Psyche LOL LOL , Alan!
You've made me giggle. ... Oct 27 10, 17:57 ohsteve Alan, I don't think it is the poem, it is just... Oct 24 10, 09:05 Alan Dear Steve,
Nice to hear from you, even if it is ... Oct 24 10, 10:42 JLY Alan,
As usual you have a poem that has an underla... Oct 26 10, 11:23 Alan Dear Steve, Snow and John,
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