 The Envious Star (revised 25th Aug), Wizard Award ~ Swap Quatrain and couplet |
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 Aug 26 07, 13:17
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 376 Joined: 28-May 07 From: Co. Galway, Ireland Member No.: 440 Real Name: Terry O C Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Ephiny  |
QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Aug 26 07, 19:08 ) [snapback]101593[/snapback] Hmm - I don't think Daniel meant for those last two lines to be added to your poem (since he posted them outside the quote) - he was posting it as a 'poetic reply' in closing, correct me if I'm wrong here Daniel... So here I've risen from afar... to help reflect this errant star... Cheers Cleo, no it's ok, I know he's just playing... nice though and funny.  I just kept it in to acknowledge. I've already made the tweaks suggested by yourself and Daniel. Thanks  . ·······  ·······Terry
light lights light --Raymond Rosliep "The imagination imitates. It is the critical spirit that creates." --Oscar Wilde MM Award Winner      |
  
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Aug 26 07, 13:33
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 Creative Chieftain Posts: 1,621 Joined: 18-August 05 From: Johannesburg, South Africa Member No.: 127 Real Name: Beverleigh Gail Annegarn Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Jox |
Hello Terry
Loved this poem. We are travelling to Botswana next week for 9 days and I know I will see stars again not seen normally in the city. The sky is like a black velvet fabric studded with sparkling pins! Awesome! I normally feel so small in comparison to the universe and all the stars: gone, exploded and still twinkling like you wrote. Well done on this. PP ······· ······· |
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Aug 26 07, 15:08
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 376 Joined: 28-May 07 From: Co. Galway, Ireland Member No.: 440 Real Name: Terry O C Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Ephiny |
Hi Bev,
Now I'm the envious one, that sounds beautiful, Botswana WOW!!! ...and thanks for your reaction, I'm delighted with t he response. I'm sure when you come back after your trip the muse will be invigorated and I look forward to hearing of your adventures through verse. Bon Voyage!! . ······· ·······Terry
light lights light --Raymond Rosliep "The imagination imitates. It is the critical spirit that creates." --Oscar Wilde MM Award Winner |
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Nov 4 07, 10:02
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Congrats Terry on your (first) wizard award winning tile (more than 25 replies)!
 Well done!   ~Cleo 
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner       |
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Nov 4 07, 15:26
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 376 Joined: 28-May 07 From: Co. Galway, Ireland Member No.: 440 Real Name: Terry O C Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Ephiny |
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What a great surprise   Thanks Cleo and everybody!  "Also I'd like to thank my first grade English teacher Miss. Heaney who first sparked my interest in....bla bla bla...(3 hours later)... ...and finally I'd like to thank the dog and all the little people who made this possible"  Cheers. . ······· ·······Terry
light lights light --Raymond Rosliep "The imagination imitates. It is the critical spirit that creates." --Oscar Wilde MM Award Winner |
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Nov 4 07, 17:41
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
 All the little people, I never forgot you, you know who you are.  TeeheeTerry - might we use this in our Swap Quatrain collection? You should a few mails from me about it. Cheers ~Cleo 
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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Nov 4 07, 19:47
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 376 Joined: 28-May 07 From: Co. Galway, Ireland Member No.: 440 Real Name: Terry O C Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Ephiny |
Hi Cleo,
Re: Chapbook/The Envious Star Yes, I got a request for permission, I'v printed it out and signed it and will post it tomorrow. Thanks for accepting it, it's such an honor. I hope it all goes well. Best Wishes!!! . ······· ·······Terry
light lights light --Raymond Rosliep "The imagination imitates. It is the critical spirit that creates." --Oscar Wilde MM Award Winner |
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Nov 4 07, 20:24
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Oh goodie! Yay!
 If I haven't asked yet, can you please (if you'd be so kind) PM me your mailing address? I'm preparing my holiday card and calendar mailing list and need to get all our newbie's addresses.  ~Cleo ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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