Dear Ashley
Welcome to MM !
And you've chosen to post a very skillful intro to your talents, kinda wistful.
I have only one tiny Q : You use "I move" twice in the first three lines - is this deliberate, or can you find another phrase for one of them. For me this double weakens an otherwise lovely read.
Oh, and do feel free to disagree completely with any/every thing I say !
Love Alan
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